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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by Scorpion0422 23:09, 28 March 2009 [1].

Veronica Mars (season 1)

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Nominator(s): Corn.u.co.pia • Disc.us.sion
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I am nominating this for featured list because I feel it meets the FL criteria. Corn.u.co.pia • Disc.us.sion 07:13, 5 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Truco

Review by Truco (talk · contribs)

  • The first season garnered an average of 2.5 million viewers per all 22 episodes in the U.S.. -- Remove the final period, its not needed when using acronyms as such
  • The pilot was watched by 2.49 million viewers,[5] while the final was watched 2.99 million viewers. -- add "by" before 2.99
Critical reception


Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 20:06, 14 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

Done

  • "When Veronica discovers new evidence which suggests that Lilly's convicted killer"-->When Veronica discovers new evidence that suggests Lilly's convicted killer
  • "a number of"-->several
  • an update to the "classic California film noir."-->an update to the "classic California film noir".
  • "this season's most interesting character creation."-->"this season's most interesting character creation".
  • "and noted the supporting characters were more than just plot devices, and the guest stars were well-utilized." "and ... and"; not a well-stuctured sentence.
  • "Robert Abele of LA Weekly said " Add "that" after this.
  • "just the sort of satisfying capper you look for in a series that, week after week, keeps you asking questions."-->"just the sort of satisfying capper you look for in a series that, week after week, keeps you asking questions".
  • "Michael Abernethy of PopMatters said that "intrigue, drama, and humor, Veronica Mars is also a lesson book for the disenfranchised. Few TV series aim so high; even fewer succeed so well."" The prose doesn't flow into the quote well here.
  • "Srikamswaren pointed that despite" Insert "out" after "pointed".
  • "Veronica stakes out a seedy motel" Comma after here.
  • "Meanwhile" Idle word, audit throughout for it.
  • "Duncan temporarily goes off his antidepressants" "goes off" is colloquial. Why not "stops taking"?
  • "and hallucinates his dead sister" Wouldn't it be "hallucinates about"?
  • "Veronica and company " Once again, too informal.
  • "Veronica suspects the election"-->Veronica suspects that the election
  • "finds out"-->discovers (multiple occurences)
  • "Sarah disappears, she tries to find" Who is "she"?
  • "which "09er" Casey joined"-->that "09er" Casey joined
  • "by the former lover" What do you mean by "the"; do you mean "his"?
  • "who is revealed to be Duncan"
  • "Veronica also has to contend "
  • "Veronica takes the case" Another example of potentially ambiguous colloquial language; some might think that "case" is referring to a suitcase. Remember that we have to cater to all English-speaking audiences, not just Americans.
  • "Keith secretly takes hair samples from Veronica and sends them in for a DNA test, and Veronica and Logan begin secretly dating. " The DNA test phrase and the dating phrase are unrelated; split them apart.
  • "and that he got it from Logan"-->and that he received it from Logan
  • "and her investigation comes to a conclusion"-->and her investigation concludes
  • "which leads to an uncomfortable car ride with Veronica's ex-boyfriend Duncan. " Can you elaborate? I'm sure that being put in a class didn't directly lead to this.

Not done

Thanks for the review. :) I moved to the comments to "done" and "not done" for simplicity's sake. Corn.u.co.pia • Disc.us.sion 00:48, 14 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 21:46, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Apart from that it looks good. Rambo's Revenge (How am I doing?) 12:01, 26 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. :) Corn.u.co.pia • Disc.us.sion 12:49, 26 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff I forgot. I know the episodes themselves provide the director/writers/prod code info, and I will assume they are correct. However a general reference would be nice if it can be found. The episodes don't provide the airdate info and (usually) don't provide the name either. So I think you need an general ref for these (e.g. something like this) Also I have checked and S1 (unlike S3) is not available as video on demand from Amazon Unbox, iTunes and the like. However I think that http://www.thewb.com/shows/veronica-mars/ might show some episodes as video on demand. Might be worth mentioning if it is true. Rambo's Revenge (How am I doing?) 14:44, 26 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I added the general refs. I can't access TheWB website because I don't live in the US, but I don't think it's that necessary anyways. Thanks for the idea though. :) Corn.u.co.pia • Disc.us.sion 05:07, 27 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Actually Scorpion it does have some DVD release info. already. It is just located here in prose form. Best, Rambo's Revenge (How am I doing?) 18:52, 26 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, I did notice that. I meant a section with a table, etc. -- Scorpion0422 23:21, 26 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I think the prose has all of that info anyways. Is there anything in particular from the table that you would like me to add to the prose? Corn.u.co.pia • Disc.us.sion 05:07, 27 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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