Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Pakistan women Twenty20 International cricketers/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by Crisco 1492 03:08, 1 March 2014 [1].

List of Pakistan women Twenty20 International cricketers

Nominator(s): Zia Khan 00:54, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I have already a candidate running at the FLC which has two supports, so this one shouldn't have problems. This list is based upon List of South Africa women Twenty20 International cricketers and I think this meets the FL standards. Comments/suggestions are appreciated, as always! Cheers, Zia Khan 00:54, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Çomments

"The first Twenty20 International match was held" ---> "The first women Twenty20 International match was held"
- Done. —Zia Khan 23:00, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Year of latest game" ---> "Year of last game" (since you have used "present" for players which have not retired)
- Done. —Zia Khan 23:00, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"01" ---> "1" (50 column)
- Done. —Zia Khan 23:00, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Add a note telling that how are ties and NRs taken into consideration while calculating the win%.
- Done. —Zia Khan 23:00, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I am on a wiki-break till March, so please count it as a Support if the above concerns are fixed. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ ^Talk ^Email 14:39, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments! —Zia Khan 23:00, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work on this list. A couple of comments, not sure if these are important:

"Pakistan have played 37 Twenty20 Internationals under four different captains" - should this read "Pakistan have played thirty-seven..."?
The pictures above the table - should they be aligned so they are down the side of the table? I seem to recall a cricket-list that did this, but I can't for the life of me remember which one it was!

Both done. Thanks for the comments. —Zia Khan 12:49, 24 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Lugnuts ^{Dick Laurent is dead} 11:41, 24 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

No probs. Thanks again for your great work with these cricket lists. I made some minor edits in the meantime to this article, let me know if you have a question on any of those. Still recovering from England finally winning in Oz and the 3rd ODI between NZ and India! Lugnuts ^{Dick Laurent is dead} 10:35, 25 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support. High quality effort. Meticulous sourcing throughout. — Cirt (talk) 05:19, 27 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Regretful oppose needs updating.

Image caption could use some work so it's written in nice prose, e.g. "The Pakistan women's team at Sydney, in the 2009 ICC Women's World Twenty20"
- Done. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
" two of the top 10 " maybe "two of the top ten"
- Done. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
And I imagine it should be "top-ten-ranked"
- Done. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I would consider the use of the T20I abbreviation so you don't have to keep repeating the mouthful every time!
- Done. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe consider including the result of the first T20I the Pakistan women played in?
- Done. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Source [4] indicates that they have played 43 games, not 37 per the lead. It also means that you should update the statistics in the rest of the lead and in the table.
- Updated. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Not sure where the "under four different captains" is sourced. In fact, this seems to imply just three.
- Fixed. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"which competed in" -> "to compete in".
- Done. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Is it "women T20Is" or "Women T20Is"?
- This is based upon List of South Africa women Twenty20 International cricketers. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Runs doesn't sort perfectly for me, I see 0 then two em-dashes, then another 0...
- Fixed. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take another look and do some more source checks once the article has been updated. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:37, 6 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments, I'll wait for you. Please also have a look at the other one. —Zia Khan 02:20, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Mild oppose

The first link of the opening sentence should be linked to Women's Twenty20 International rather than Women's Twenty20 cricket.
- Done. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
There seems to a connection issue with ref #1
- Done. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Not done. It isn't working for me. —Vensatry _(Ping) 18:25, 28 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
The succeeding sentence is a bit confusing
- fixed. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
extra the in "the The Vineyard, Dublin"
- Removed one. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Ref #4 doesn't support the claim
- Fixed. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comma needed after "In 2009"
- Done. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"She and Nain Abidi" poor grammar
- reworded. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
most capped player -> most capped players
- Done. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
56 and 56 n.o aren't equivalent scores
- Removed the 56 part. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
You could use batswom(a/e)n since we are discussing about women's cricket
- Done. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"to score a fifty in the format for Pakistan" which format, WC?
- clarified. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Are you sure that Bismah Maroof's batting average is the highest?
- Yes. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Technically not so. At least three have better averages than Maroof. It's better to add a note here —Vensatry _(Ping) 18:25, 28 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Needs "As of ..." for most of the individual records
- Done. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Maroof also has taken 16 catches which are more than any other Pakistani as a fielder" not true
- source provided. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Link doesn't work. It's probable that you mis-typed the URL —Vensatry _(Ping) 18:25, 28 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Figures for the following sentence need to be updated
- Updated. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Sadia Yousuf has the best return" not sure what you mean by return
- Fixed. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Need to mention the team Sarah Taylor is playing for
- Done. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"She also has taken eight catches as a fielder" you mean Taylor? The ref. doesn't support the claim here as well
- removed the sentence. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Since the team was formed, 28 women have represented Pakistan in T20I cricket" a little confusing
- What is confusing here?. —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've not checked the table and sources. I see the usage of "Having ..." three times in four successive sentences. The prose needs a little amount of work before it gets promoted. A spotcheck may be carried out since I came across two sentences where the source didn't really support the fact during a random check. —Vensatry _(Ping) 10:49, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done. I think, I've sufficiently addressed your concerns. Let me know if I'm missing something. Thanks for the review! Regards, —Zia Khan 13:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

There are quite a few concerns which still remain unaddressed. Once they are done, I'll revisit this page for further comments. —Vensatry _(Ping) 18:25, 28 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This article is nearing two months and has two outstanding opposes. As such, I am archiving it. I recommend continuing discussion with reviewers before nominating again. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:45, 1 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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