Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Awake episodes/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by The Rambling Man 14:26, 17 June 2012 [1].

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List of Awake episodes

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Nominator(s): TBrandley • talk • contributions 20:57, 10 June 2012 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured list because it meets criteria. TBrandley • talk • contributions 20:57, 10 June 2012 (UTC)

Oppose

• Minor concern that this couldn't just be included in the main article. But that's a borderline concern.
• Avoid bold links in the lead per WP:CONTEXTLINK.
  • Done
• Lead image is dull, and the caption more so because it just repeats some of the lead.
• Perhaps find a suitable link for "separate realities".
  • Done
• "where he wears a green wrist band" perhaps move that to before the crash portion, i.e. in the green reality where he wears...
• "Michael doesn't know " avoid contractions.
  • Done
• You then swap the order of the realities. No need.
• "In the United States, the first episode of the series originally..." -> "In the United States, the first episode of Awake..."
  • Done
• "It concluded on May 24, 2012"... the first episode was nearly three months long? Rephrase.
  • Done
• " It concluded on May 24, 2012, after it was canceled after eleven of thirteen produced episodes were aired, on May 11, 2012.[2" very poor grammar and odd to read, suggest a copyedit.
• Don't overlink NBC etc.
• "Despite the series' relatively short life span, it has had large fan support campaigns who teamed up to create the "Save Awake" campaign, and it was well received by television commentators, particularly episodes "Pilot" and "Say Hello to My Little Friend", and various cast members, particularly Jason Isaacs's performance.[5]" huge sentence with far too many run-ons. Re-work.
  • Done

That's the lead, too much now to even consider supporting. Please address, or perhaps better still, withdraw, take it to peer review and then return when it's been seriously looked at. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:53, 14 June 2012 (UTC)

• • Okay. I will withdraw and have it for peer review. Hope to see you there! TBrandley 04:48, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

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