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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by SchroCat (talk) 08:10, 16 February 2015 [1].

Kajol filmography

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Nominator(s): FrankBoy (Buzz) 13:24, 27 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because the filmography gives a good summary of the actress, who is known for her melodramatic yet intensive performances. The filmography has been thoroughly researched by me. As usual, looking forward to a lot of constructive comments. FrankBoy (Buzz) 13:24, 27 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ssven2

It is a really good list. I have spotted some small changes which can be made to make the list look even better.

  • "and essayed the role of a tomboy in Karan Johar's highly successful romantic comedy Kuch Kuch Hota Hai opposite Shah Rukh Khan.[14][17][18]" — Just 1 or, at the most, 2 references would suffice.
  • "Kajol starred in ₹1.17 billion (US$14 million)-grossing film Kabhi Khushi Kabhie Gham... (2001), an ensemble melodrama.[23][24]" — the entire part about KKKG can be rephrased as "Kajol starred in the 2001 ensemble melodrama, Kabhi Khushi Kabhie Gham..., where she essayed the role of a Punjabi girl. The film grossed ₹ 1.17 billion, therefore becoming the highest-grossing film of all time in the overseas market."
  • "a highly successful romantic thriller set on the backdrop of terrorism." — Rephrase it as "The film, a romantic thriller which was based on terrorism, was a commercial success."
  • "Also that year, she appeared in the 3D animation Toonpur Ka Super Hero." — Can you source the sentence?
  • There should be a mention about Minsara Kanavu in the lead as it is her only Tamil film to date.

@FrB.TG: Thank you for addressing my comments quite quickly. This article has my Support. — Ssven2 speak 2 me 15:16, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from —Vensatry (Ping me)
Comments from —Vensatry (ping)
  • Images need alt text
  • "She, however, was noted for her role and went on to sign the 1993 ...." The source from The Hindu only mentions that her appearance was spotted by somebody and not the role as you claim here.
  • Too many "roles" in the lead. I can count at least four in the opening para alone.
  • "This was followed with a role" -> This was followed by a role
  • "1995 saw Kajol in four films" reads too plain. Consider rephrasing the part like "The following year" or at least "The year 1995".
  • "She had a brief role in the thriller Karan Arjun and played Simran, " The comma is misplaced here. For a moment it looks like she played Simran in Karan Arjun.
  • You could add a note mentioning the no. of theatres that are still showing DDLJ. Also the claim needs more than one source.
  • "She also appeared in the box-office flops Hulchul and Gundaraj" and the succeeding sentence, both don't read well at all. I guess "Box-office bomb" is not encyclopaedic. Also year of release should be there.
  • "In 1997, Kajol appeared in the Tamil film Minsara Kanavu." - This seems out of place. Looks like this is her only non-Bollywood film till date.
  • "she played the leading lady of the romantic film Ishq" -> she played the leading lady in the romantic film Ishq.
  • she had double-role in - article missing. The whole sentence (especially the succeeding clause) desperately needs to be rephrased.
  • "Tomboy" isn't a role. It's a characteristic
  • "highly successful" borders on WP:PEACOCK
  • "The following year, she played the mistress ...." I'd suggest you to add the year here since you have a big gap between the last mention of year and this one.
  • "thus becoming the highest-grossing film of all time in overseas market" - is it the highest-grossing Indian film or just in Bollywod alone? Also needs "as of ..."
  • Not needed as it is described in the note.
  • On second thoughts, I don't think it's even necessary to mention box-office figure in a filmography and as for the date issue, I have added "to that point".
  • There should be an indication of the order in which the films are listed in the table
  • It's pretty visible through the years and all featured filmographies use the same.
  • Done.
  • Why is that you've not included a "Director" column in the table?
  • I do not feel the need for this one as the article is about her films, which year they released, what role she played. It's not that important and Leonardo DiCaprio also does not use the one, but if you insist so, I can add it.
  • Added.
  • Role-> Role(s)
  • It was only a special appearance in Duplicate.
  • Naina Saigal (Sonia)-> Naina Saigal, Sonia Saigal
  • What about Vighnaharta Shree Siddhivinayak. Is it a feature film and was it released?
  • Per source, it was.
  • I have removed the film from the table as I don't find the film notable.
  • Makkhi is only the dubbed version of Eega. Doesn't count as an acting credit. Also you've mentioned her role as a 'cameo' but the "role" column says she provided only the voice-over.
  • I have removed the film from the table as it was only a dubbed film in which she lent her voice.
  • Roles for special appearances should be '–' instead of "Unknown"
  • Ref #6 is from Indian Express and not TOI
  • Ref #10 and #21 need author
    • While the last para looks good to me, the first two need a serious copy-edit. For now, it looks like presenting a list of bulleted-points in a passage form. Also I don't see a need to add four images of her, all taken during the same time. —Vensatry (ping) 20:29, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Vensatry: Thanks for pointing out the issues. Almost all of the above have been resolved. I have kept one image present in the table section as it is in the "Did you know" template, and have removed the other two. Do you have more things to say here --FrankBoy (Buzz) 23:25, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • The last two lines seem out of place in an otherwise engaging lede. I'd suggest you to add a bit about her winning the trophy for the fifth time right after MNIK and have the Nutan thing probably as a FN. —Vensatry (ping) 17:36, 7 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support: I think it is a well written list based on prose. Barring anything previously mentioned above and making improvements, it's fine.
--Birdienest81 (talk) 02:38, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Krimuk90
  • A mention must be made of the extensive work that she has done with Shah Rukh Khan and Karan Johar.
  • Wikilink NRI.
  • Mention that she played dual roles in Dushman.
  • Replace "long sabbatical" with the number of years she was absent from the screen.
  • The sudden listing of her Filmfare Awards, in between her roles in 2010, is jarring. Please mention it at the end of the paragraph.
  • In the filmography table, use footnotes to state that she played dual roles in Hamesha, Dushman, and Kuch Khatti Kuch Meethi. -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 06:19, 7 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support: Looks good now, after a further round of copy/edits. -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 10:09, 7 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]


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