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2022 Ballon d'Or (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)
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- Nominator(s): Idiosincrático (talk) 03:25, 28 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The 2022 Ballon d'Or was a ceremony held last year to recognise the best footballers of the previous season. Karim Benzema won the primary award with the article detailing all the nominees of every award category. The lists are FL standard because each category has a detailed blurb on each winner and their successes during the season, all the tables are complete with every nominee and they're all cited with reliable and archived references. Idiosincrático (talk) 03:25, 28 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by RunningTiger123
[edit]- All images need alt text
- Display the full external link at the bottom of the infobox
- Why is the translation listed in the lead when the award is already in French?
- "the 66th annual ceremony of the Ballon d'Or" – feels awkward, maybe try "annual presentation of" or "annual ceremony for"?
- "France international" → "French international" for consistency
- "one of five players apart of Real Madrid's UEFA Champions League winning team" – "apart" is wrong, should probably use "on"
- Also clarify that there were five players recognized in Ballon d'Or voting, not that there were five players on Real Madrid as the sentence currently implies
- Hyphenate "UEFA Champions League–winning team"
- "and he was selected" → "and was selected"
- Virgil van Dijk should sort by "van Dijk"
- "Alexia Putellas won the 2022 Ballon d'Or Féminin, she finished ahead ..." – comma splice
- No need for sobriquets like "the Spaniard", "the Pole" – just use their names
- Move the last sentence of the paragraph discussing the Kopa Trophy ("Gavi won the 2022 Kopa Trophy ...") to the start of the paragraph to provide better context
- "Belgium international" → "Belgian international"
- "The 2021 award winner, Gianluigi Donnarumma, was not nominated for the award." – citation needed as to why this is relevant
- "The award was previously known as the Striker of the Year, this edition it was renamed ..." – comma splice
- The Gerd Müller Trophy and Sócrates Award tables need row scopes (see H:TABLE or the other tables in the list)
- "France Football announced the creation of the 'Sócrates Award' on 21 September 2022, the trophy identifies ..." – comma splice
- "since the inaugural edition in 2021" – awkward wording, maybe try "following the award's introduction in 2021"?
- "... having the same number of player nominations, however, because City's nominations spread ..." → "having the same number of player nominations; because City's nominations were spread ..."
— RunningTiger123 (talk) 18:01, 28 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank You so much you legend, I think I've addressed all your points, let me know if there is anything else or if I've missed something. Cheers Idiosincrático (talk) 05:01, 29 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I made a few changes in places where I wasn't clear about the issue and am good to support now. RunningTiger123 (talk) 19:42, 29 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments
- "Establishing himself as a regular in Ronald Koeman's side, Spain national team manager Luis Enrique" - as written, this indicates that it was Luis Enrique who established himself in the Barca team. Change to "After he established himself as a regular in Ronald Koeman's side, Spain national team manager Luis Enrique"
- "becoming the youngest player to represent the national team" => "making him the youngest player to represent the national team"
- Above the tables you say "For players who appeared for multiple clubs during the season", yet some of the notes relate to players who changed clubs at the start of the season. By "start of the season" do you actually mean "very soon after the season started" rather than before it started....?
- "Mané had a successful personal season with Liverpool, winning the FA Cup, EFL Cup and reaching the UEFA Champions League final" => "Mané had a successful personal season with Liverpool, winning the FA Cup and EFL Cup and reaching the UEFA Champions League final"
- "English club Manchester City won Club of the Year ahead of Liverpool, Real Madrid and Lyon. With the most nominations across the two categories" - what two categories......?
- That's it! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 09:14, 30 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you @ChrisTheDude: I think I've address all your comments, I changed all the table notes to "during the season". Please let me know if there is anything else.
- Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:42, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments by EnthusiastWorld37
- "In the other award categories, Gavi was awarded the Kopa Trophy" and "Sadio Mané was awarded the inaugural Sócrates Award" - repetition of the word "awarded"
- "Thibaut Courtois won the Yashin Trophy, Robert Lewandowski won the newly named Gerd Müller Trophy," - repetition of the word "won"
That's all I have from my readthrough EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 16:54, 25 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- All addressed, cheers @EnthusiastWorld37: Idiosincrático (talk) 00:03, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Support – EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 17:45, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Source review – The references appear reliable enough and the link-checker tool shows no issues. There are a couple of small formatting tweaks that could stand to be made, though:
- All caps in the title of ref 8 (SPORTS) should be taken out.
- Hyphens in the titles of refs 14, 22, 34, 35, and 54 should be converted into en dashes per style guidelines. Giants2008 (Talk) 21:26, 2 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Since it was just minor formatting issues in the source review, just did it myself to knock this off the list. Promoted. --PresN 02:52, 3 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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