Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/1974 Asian Games medal table/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by Dabomb87 14:39, 21 July 2011 [1].

1974 Asian Games medal table

Featured list candidates/1974 Asian Games medal table/archive1

Nominator(s): — Bill william compton^Talk 16:01, 24 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

In my view this article satisfies all the criteria of FL, and I'll do my best in addressing all the concerns and queries. — Bill william compton^Talk 16:01, 24 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:52, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

;Comments by Legolas2186

September 1, 1974 --> comma after 1974

Done

in an any country of Middle East. --> in any Middle East country.

Done

At the Games, 3,010 athletes --> Doesnot look nice, try "A total of 3,010 athletes... don't forget to use non-breaking spaces.

Done

Join the last two sentences of the first para.

Done

In the medal table, do we need the country name abbreviations? They are not indicating anything elsewhere in the article.

These abbreviations are template generated, so I can't remove them; and perhaps you might have neglected first para of "Medal table" section— "If nations are still tied, equal ranking is given; they are listed alphabetically by IOC country code, and these abbreviations are IOC country codes.

In references, accessdate should be May 1 instead of May 01.

Done

Online sources like Olympic council and Pakistan Sports Board etc should not be italicized.

Done

Not sure how much those redlinks have a chance of getting an article created sooner than later. Seeing that this is a 1974 awards table, I would recommend removing them.

Don't worry, I'll make articles for them.

Haha, would love to see you create wonderful articles on them. :) — Legolas ^(talk2me) 14:49, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

These are some of the issues I found in a glance. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:52, 27 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think this qualifies as a FL now, I support this. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 14:49, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure whether articles would be "wonderful" or not, but I'll try to keep them in decent shape (demo), and would you please strike out your comments now. One more thing, I know this is not a right place for this, but I'm a big fan of your work, as I'm also an admirer (or, devotee would be better to say) of Madge and Gaga. Keep it up - your amazing work. — Bill william compton^Talk 16:19, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oh god, *blushing* didn't know I had admirers. Well, I have supported this list, no need to strike out eh? :) — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:39, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It's perfect. — Bill william compton^Talk 17:22, 29 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Giants2008 (27 and counting) 22:05, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments –

Three "the"s needed in first sentence of second paragraph; one at the start and one before Asian Games Federation's and People's Republic of China.

Done

"finished at the second spot in a medal table". "a" → "the". Do the same with the last sentence of the lead.

Done

In the Hasegawa caption, add more "the"s before "gold medal" and "men's doubles event". Also, commas would be helpful before and after "paired with Mitsuru Kohno".

Done

Changes in medal standings: It's never said what substance the two weightlifters tested positive for.

Done I really don't know about the specific chemical, but it was stimulant, so add it there.

Two more "the"s needed before "heavyweight category" at various times in this section, and one before "middle heavyweight category".

Done

I'm not sure what "due to marginal overweight" means. Is this meant to be "due to being marginally overweight"?

Done

"Two gold of Masashi" → "The two golds of Masashi"?

Done

Remove comma before Pourdejam's name.

Done

In reference 3, the link to The Journal goes to a Connecticut paper, not one from Switzerland. Also, the publisher link goes to an English paper. The link is at Record-Journal.

Done

Giants2008 (27 and counting) 22:26, 3 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support – Meets FL standards. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 22:05, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 11:59, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Last sentence of the first para of the lead is a little odd because the two clauses really aren't related at all, so the semi-colon seems a little, well, odd to me.

But Legolas asked me to make them one.

Well, it's fine, but they're not linked together so it'd be better if they weren't linked at all. Think about expanding them both a bit and then having them as standalone sentences. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:16, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Done

You abbreviate NOC but never use it.

Removed

"play with Israel in tennis" I would suggest "face" rather than "play with".

Done

"Pakistan and Singapore improved their position in the general medal table compared to the 1970 Asian Games" and none of the others did? Just trying to clarify why this is so particularly relevant.

It's relevant because they were the only two nations beside Iran (which I've explained in later sentence) that improved their rankings.

Not clear that Iran (who you mention two sentences later) was one of only three ranking positions to have improved. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:16, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

In simple sentence yes, there were only three nations (Iran, Pakistan and Singapore) which improved their rankings in the medal table as compare to the last Games (Israel and Japan retained their position, means no change).

Okay. Can you say that easily and elegantly? The Rambling Man (talk) 19:53, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Removed I've removed the whole sentence. It's better without any comparison.

"South Korea devolved to fourth position with 16 gold and 57 overall medals, South Korea ranked second"... perhaps "ranking" instead of "South Korea ranked..."

Done

"second in the medal table of the last Asian Games" confusing, perhaps "previous" rather than "last".

Done

"or the banned substance " what's "the" banned substance?

Explained above to Giants.

Not really, it's actually just "a banned substance". Unless you can tell me what "the" substance actually was. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:16, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Replaced Oh, mon erreur.

The Record-Journal is actually just "Record-Journal".

I'll change, but please first check here, isn't it "The Record-Journal".

Sure, I'm going with our own article. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:16, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Do you want me to remove "the"?

No major trauma. It's a redirect, that's all. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:53, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Okay.

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:54, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support The Rambling Man (talk) 10:59, 17 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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