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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 04:34, 30 March 2007.

Wyoming

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A general good article, very well written, lots of references, pictures. No mistakes, and good enough to be a featured article. Retiono Virginian 13:07, 22 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Oppose Article has only 6 references , too many data charts and is lacking in information overall.--MONGO 14:24, 22 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose. My quirk as a reader only, but I love to read about transportation systems when I look at a geography article. Unfortunately, the trasnportation section in this article is just a bunch of highways, and this need either expansion or a paragraph with a pointer to a side article "Transportation in Wyoming" or something like that. In general the article is pretty good however, with a decent number of illustrations, although I am not all that good at distinguishing the brilliant prose from the other prose. Sjakkalle (Check!) 15:10, 22 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Firm Oppose This is not Featured Article quality. While the prose is excellently written, the sheer amount of figures and data which is unsourced is staggering. Six sources, true, but three of them are from the 2000-2005 US Census. Just looking at the article, I can see a lot of room required for sources. Additionally, there's a few items which could be substantially improved. The following is a list of things which caught my eye:
    • "Although French trappers may have ventured into the northern sections of the state in the late 1700s, John Colter, a member of the Lewis and Clark Expedition, was probably the first white American to enter the region in 1807." (What's the source of this statement? And we need something better than "Was probably?")
    • "In 1869, Wyoming extended much suffrage to women, at least partially in an attempt to garner enough votes to be admitted as a state. In addition to being the first U.S. state to extend suffrage to women, Wyoming was also the home of many other firsts for U.S. women in politics." (This definitely needs sourcing as well, especially in regards to the statement that it was so Wyoming would have enough votes to count as a state.)
    • "Wyoming was the location of the Johnson County War of 1892 which was fought between large cattle operators and free ranging interest groups. This war was fought because of the new ranchers moving in following the passage of the homestead act." (Another statement in need of sourcing, especially the second sentence.)
    • Transportation needs to be turned into prose. It would would take all of two paragraphs to give the reader a lot more context about how those highways and interstates cross Wyoming, and I'm sure there's got to be railway information as well.
      • For example, Interstate 80 could be changed to read something like "The Interstate 80 runs east to west through the southern end of Wyoming, passing through (insert major cities here), crossing (insert other major roadways).
    • Likewise Sports needs to be turned into prose.
    • State Symbols could be turned into prose as well, and the trivia about the USS Wyoming could probably be moved up to the lead-in paragraph of the article so that you don't have the Trivia-like "Miscellaneous information" header.
Address those items and I'll support this nomination. Cheers, Lankybugger○ speak○ see○ 16:54, 22 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments: Lot of problems need to be solved. A very non=comprehensive sample:
    • The 2nd sentence of the lead just shouldn't be the 2nd sentence. Surely there are much more important things to say about Wyoming.
    • "The region known today as the state of Wyoming was originally inhabited by.." what is "originally"? Hash this out, since when, for how long?
    • "After the Union Pacific Railroad reached the town of Cheyenne, which later became the state capital, in 1867" -- confusing. Which of the 2 happenned in 1867?
    • "which became the world's first National Park in 1872" -- citation needed.
    • "In 1869, Wyoming extended much suffrage to women" -- clarify "much suffrage"
    • "Wyoming is an alcoholic beverage control state." -- explain briefly what this is.--ppm 00:37, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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