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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Karanacs 21:07, 27 September 2009 [1].

The Dark Side of the Moon

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Nominator(s): Parrot of Doom (talk) 15:10, 14 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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The last time this was nominated, most of the discussion centred around the use of NFCC content. I'm renominating now because the other issues within that FAC have been addressed, and all that now remains is discussion of the NFCC images used (and for some users, perhaps the audio clips also). One of the NFCC cover images has since been deleted. All NFCC content is referenced and discussed within the article, and I believe its presence is more than justified in an article about one of the most famous and biggest-selling rock albums in history. Parrot of Doom (talk) 15:10, 14 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Though I will not be reviewing, I'd just like to see the description for the mobile fidelity CD changed to fair use. It will undoubtedly be brought up if not. - ʄɭoʏɗiaɲ τ ¢ 16:40, 14 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I agree it should be fair use, as the point of that image seems to be the copyrighted material (and perhaps the gold-plated-ness, which is a bit hard to make out there with the disc art anyway). If I knew how I'd quick-move it out of Commons and to en.wikipedia for shrinking and FUR-ing and whatever. Parrot of Doom is very much not "the copyright holder of this work", as much as this free content fan would like him to be. :) --an odd name 04:12, 15 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I'm no expert on copyright or images. Can anyone help fix whatever is wrong with this? Parrot of Doom (talk) 20:44, 15 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. The commons image must be deleted (No fair use at commons), so I had to upload the image to wikipedia under a new name. The article has been updated to the new image. You may wish to check it out to make sure I got the information correct, as I don't own this version of the cd. - ʄɭoʏɗiaɲ τ ¢ 16:22, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good to me. The resolution on the FUI one is just right; any smaller and the gold-ness and general design would be tough to discern. --an odd name 00:28, 18 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Source comments: What makes these reliable?

Dabs and links All fine. RB88 (T) 20:02, 14 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Further comments:

Support - with regard to criteria 1a-e, 2a-c, 3 and 4. There are no facts that are likely to be contested. The nominator has bent over backwards to reach a consensus, both here and at previous nominations. This is the best article about this ground-breaking album on the internet. A few choices of prose style remain, which I would not use—such as "The Dark Side of the Moon builds upon previous experiments Pink Floyd had attempted in their live shows"—but I fully support this candidate. Graham Colm Talk 20:49, 16 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support (1a). Looks well-written.

  • "Mental illness" linked at the top? Which one was it? I think that link-target is dangerously general! Consider no link. Linking technique otherwise looks good, but not London, please (WP:LINKING).
    • Nobody really knows. Its impossible therefore to be specific especially as Barrett's unstable condition may or may not have been a result of his drug use. The album is similarly ambiguous, and therefore I think its best the article is also so. Parrot of Doom (talk) 15:49, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It would subsequently remain on the charts for 741 weeks (fourteen years)": Oh .. my .. god. Language: please consider "It remained on the ...". And see "Comparable quantities" at MOS?
    • This wouldn't really be appropriate, since the album has dropped out of the chart on a few occasions. In fact the precise chart history of the album is difficult to fathom as the chart qualifications have changed over time. A joe-public version would be "It stayed in the charts for ages, longer than anything else, although sometimes it dropped out for a bit". Parrot of Doom (talk) 15:49, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Melody Maker was however less enthusiastic—"Musically, there were some great ideas, but the sound effects often left me wondering if I was in a bird-cage at London zoo." Perhaps a colon rather than an em dash?
  • "upon"—consider plain English nowadays: "on".
  • "turning point" – I think better hyphenated in that sentence. See what you think.
  • "there are five tracks on each side, each one linked to reflect the various stages of human life"—not sure about "linked" ("each reflecting the various"?). Just after that, comma before "according".
    • With the exception of The Great Gig in the Sky and Money (split because of the limitations of the Vinyl format), each track segues into the other. Linked may be a poor choice of words, but they're all very much linked together. Can you suggest a better word? Parrot of Doom (talk) 15:49, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
      • It could be reworded to say that "the album is one continuous piece of music that is split into two halves (Due to the technical limitations of vinyl records). Each half is further split(divided) into 5 tracks, each of which reflects various stages of human life." It's lengthy (and knowing me, a grammatical nightmare), but you can't fit so much information into a single sentence without it reading strangely - ʄɭoʏɗiaɲ τ ¢ 15:59, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Image sizes: can we have them a bit bigger? Try 230px for Abbey, and especially the detail in the synthesiser significantly larger. And that great b/w pic of the concert at Earl's Court: what a waste to shrink it to almost nothing. More generous sizes? I'd boost that one to see the detail: it's superb.
    • I'm not a fan of specifying image sizes, unless there's a particular reason. My preference is to use the default size, logged-in users can change default image sizes in the options. While the images may appear small on a regular screen (say 1650px), on a laptop at anything below 1280px larger images take up a huge amount of space and lead to inconsistencies in the layout. Parrot of Doom (talk) 15:49, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Torry. Torry"
  • —"I've been mad for fucking years—absolutely years". Again, please rethink the incoming dash.
  • Please don't link "United States", "UK", "Australia", etc.

Haven't looked at the bottom half, but I trust it already. You might arrange a sift-through by someone else, but it would be a quick job. Tony (talk) 15:20, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Looks good. I was watching this during the previous FAC but it was undergoing constant significant change which made it difficult to review. Seems to have settled down nicely now. Comprehensive with good prose.

  • "the album built on the ideas Pink Floyd had explored in their live shows and previous recordings, but it lacks the extended instrumental excursions that characterised their work following the departure of founding member, principal composer and lyricist, Syd Barrett." Currently this allows for Barrett having departed either before or after this album; suggest making it explicit (perhaps "that had characterised their work since 1968 following the departure...").
  • "The Dark Side of the Moon was an immediate success, topping the Billboard 200 for one week. It would subsequently remain on the charts for 741 weeks (fourteen years)" - surely straight past tense is preferable in this case ("It subsequently remained...")
  • "Dates in North America followed before the band flew to London to begin recording the album, from 24 May–25 June." - is "24 May–25 June" the dates in North America or the beginning recording? (Also could do with "to" instead of dash.)
  • "And if the band you're in starts playing a diff'rent tune" - should be "playing different tunes".
  • "The studio was capable of sixteen track mixes which offered a greater degree of flexibility" - greater than?
  • "For several years Nick Mason had become increasingly responsible for the band's sound effects" - perhaps it's just me, but did he become it for several years?
  • "The album is a continuous piece of music split into two (because of the technical limitations of vinyl)." - I'm not sure about that. Would "Great Gig In the Sky" have segued into "Money" but for vinyl? Is there a source for this?
    • The sources don't say that the album would have been continuous but for vinyl, as there was no format at the time which could have catered for the full album (except perhaps long play tape), it wouldn't even have entered discussion. The sources I have do however mention the split. Its probably stating the obvious, but its designed to reinforce the continuity of the music - it was rare at the time for tracks to be joined so, their previous album (Meddle) still splits each track, whereas DSotM sets the trend for every album they recorded thereafter. Parrot of Doom (talk) 08:46, 23 September 2009 (UTC) [reply]
  • "Several tracks, including "Us and Them" and "Time", are notable for demonstrating Richard Wright and David Gilmour's ability to harmonise their voices. In The Making of The Dark Side of the Moon, a 2003 DVD documentary on the production of the album, Roger Waters attributes this to the fact that along with their talent, their voices both sound extremely similar." - "ability" doesn't really convey what is notable; "along with their talent" seems superfluous.
  • "She declined the first offer as she was watching Chuck Berry perform at the Hammersmith Odeon, but arranged to return on the following Sunday." - a bit colloquial and perhaps inconsequential - possibly remove?
    • I don't agree - her performance is one of the most notable features of the album, I think its worth reinforcing that she didn't really think it was all that important. She didn't even like Pink Floyd much. Its a nice progression from 'don't really care about recording it' to 'sued the band for royalties' (not that I'm casting aspersions on her character!) Parrot of Doom (talk) 08:46, 23 September 2009 (UTC) [reply]
      • Point taken; it's just that the tone seems colloquial and could be made more encyclopedic. When was she watching Berry? At the time the offer was made? (Unlikely; not many mobile phones in 1972, but the person who made the offer could have been sitting next to her, interrupting the concert—no wonder she declined!) Is it significant that is was a Sunday she arranged to return? We aren't told what day of the week the original offer pertained to. Was it in fact a "return"? Who instigated the return? If it was her, was "the first offer" really "the offer"? Anyway, none of this is a show-stopper for me but if that sentence can be improved, great. PL290 (talk) 10:57, 23 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 2003 VH1 named the album's cover as their 4th-greatest album cover of all time" - should this be "the" rather than "their"?
  • "Founding member Syd Barrett had left the band in 1968, and the burden of lyrical composition had since then fallen mostly on Waters' shoulders" - can this reflect that we already know about Barrett and his departure.
  • "The Dark Side of the Moon was released first in the US on 10 March 1973, and then in the UK on 23/24 March." - does this need a footnote explaining why the date is not certain?
    • There was a discussion about this - the sources vary on the release dates, chart history seems to suggest they're wrong. I can't find which source said 23 March though, so I've stuck it at 24. If needs be we can just say "about a fortnight later". Parrot of Doom (talk) 08:46, 23 September 2009 (UTC) [reply]
  • "Unusually, "Money" was released as a single on 7 May,[73] with "Any Colour You Like" on the B-side (in some countries—notably the UK—Pink Floyd had not released a single since 1968's "Point Me at the Sky")." - consider splitting sentence into two, so that it's clear what's unusual.
  • "It was something of a phenomena" - if Mason really said that, it needs sic
  • "He praised the mix for other songs, particularly for "The Great Gig in the Sky"—"I tip my hat [...]" - perhaps -> particularly "The Great Gig in the Sky", saying, "I tip my hat [...]"
  • "Some of the profits were invested in the production of Monty Python and the Holy Grail. The members of Pink Floyd were reportedly fans of Monty Python, to the point of interrupting recording sessions to watch Monty Python's Flying Circus." Second sentence we already know and does not need to be restated in Legacy (where it currently breaks the flow anyway).
  • "a common comparison is one made between Pink Floyd and Radiohead, specifically their 1997 album OK Computer. Although Robert Christgau commented that the album lacked "soul", calling it "arid" and "ridiculous" and comparing it unfavourably to Pink Floyd,[108] the two albums do however share a common theme: the loss of a creative individual's ability to function in the modern world.[109] Mungolian Jetset's Knut Sævik has mentioned drawing inspiration from the album" - needs reworking to be clear which of the two albums "the album" refers to each time, and whether two groups or two albums are unfavourably compared. Also "however" is superfluous.
  • "In addition to its commercial success, The Dark Side of the Moon is arguably Pink Floyd's most popular album among fans and critics" - Are we looking for arguability, or WP:Verifiability? Perhaps this assertion doesn't really add value in the Lead.
  • Blockquote used several times for short quotes (only one, two or three lines in length) - WP:MOSQUOTE) states it is for quotes of more than four lines.
  • "The light band emanating from the prism on the album cover is actually missing one color, Indigo. A normal prism would display a band of Red, Orange, Yellow, Green, Blue, Indigo and Violet." Perhaps too much spelt out? Judicious placement of the sentence nearer the preceding wikilinked word prism might be preferable.
  • Not convinced about the References/Notes/Footnotes/Bibliography structure. Is there a precedent for this? My thoughts are, (a) a footnote is a note at the foot of the page, and hence the Notes are footnotes too; (b) do the Notes really need separating out from the other footnotes?

PL290 (talk) 23:04, 22 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support - all my concerns have been met. It's good to see an engaging and comprehensive article on this album—great work. PL290 (talk) 12:27, 23 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support igordebraga ≠ 03:20, 25 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

SUPPORT The two principle reasons I believe that this should be a Featured Article are that it is well written (excellent grammar, not long-winded, but concise) and that it is extremely thorough and comprehensive. After reading the article, one comes away from the article clearly understanding the inspiration for the album, how the album was made, how incredibly popular the album became. The article offers all this and more. V Schauf (talk) 09:29, 27 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support The Dark Side of the Moon is not only my favorite album of all time, but also one of my favorite Wikipedia pages to read. I cannot think of another album article that can match how much information this one gives, or how well written this one is. I learned a lot from this one, and I hope that many other albums can have articles that reach this calibur of writing. The time for it to become a featured article is long overdue. Krobertj (talk) 17:16, 27 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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