Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Sinhala alphabet/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 18:12, 25 August 2007.

Sinhala alphabet

I self-nominate this article because it is the most comprehensive account of the Sinhala writing system available in book form or on the internet. Besides technical information about the composition of the letters, it contains information about the script's history, its modern usage, Western and native transliteration, and computer support. The information presented has been checked for factual correctness against Sri Lankan and Western literature from several academic traditions, which is referenced in footnotes+{{cite book}} style.

Special care has been taken to make the article accessible to users who do not have any Sinhala fonts installed (probably the majority): all pieces of information pertaining to the shapes of the letters are also provided as linked images. Important details of the letters are highlighted in the images and refered to in the text.

A real-life image shows the script in a natural (read non-academic) context. The very same illustration is re-used later in the article to illustrate some finer typographic points, creating a self-contained article, which is nevertheless embedded in its scientific, areal and social context by appropriate and specific linking. Jasy jatere 19:55, 30 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment. This may need a copyedit- just a quick look through the article and I had to make this edit.-Wafulz 16:56, 31 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment. For the sake of convenience, the ominous edit refers to changing 'due to the fact' to 'because'. Jasy jatere 21:41, 31 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Also a comma into a semi-colon.-Wafulz 23:43, 31 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose—Needs a copy-edit desperately. I like the subject—fascinating. Here are samples from the top of why new collaborators are required, to run through the whole text.
- First sentence: "and also"—one is redundant. I don't like "sometimes". It's the opening, so we need to get it right.
- "Being a member of the Brahmic family of scripts, the Sinhala script can trace its ancestry back more than 2000 years." Scripts don't trace back; historians and linguists do that. The causal connection beetween its membership of the B family and its long ancestry is unclear. "Being" would have been better as "as", if this causal grammar were to survive: it shouldn't.
- "Sinhala is often considered two alphabets, or an alphabet with another alphabet, due to the presence of two different sets of letters." Insert "to comprise" before "two", and remove everything after "alphabets". Then: "... alphabets; the core alphabet, known as ...". Remove "can", to make it "represents". Remove "in order". It looks very messy without the right software—all of those squares in the text.

I'd love this to be a shining FA, so why not push and pull to get the best copy-editors to work on it. It's way below standard at the moment. Tony 08:23, 12 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment Ref #3 is broken.--Rmky87 16:55, 18 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Changes since my post. Very disappointing. Tony 13:00, 20 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.