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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 11:56, 26 April 2016 [1].

Shahid Kapoor

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Nominator(s): Krimuk|90 (talk) 05:23, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Having successfully written the FA-class biographies of 4 leading actresses of Hindi cinema, this is my first attempt to write about an actor. I believe, as with the previous articles, this one meets the FA-criteria. But of course, constructive comments from established editors will only help improve the article, and I expect plenty of those. Cheers! Krimuk|90 (talk) 05:23, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Early life
  • Do we know the name of the Russian magazine?
  • "He subsequently appeared in other television commercials," -examples?
  • "He subsequently appeared in other television commercials, and also featured in music videos for several performers, including the band Aryans and the singer Kumar Sanu.[10] Kapoor also" -rep of "also"

♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:40, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Early work
  • "Writing for The Hindu, the critic Ziya Us Salam did not find him to be "hero material", writing" -rep of "writing"
  • You've linked sleeper hit but didn't in the lede. I'd link in lede too.
  • "Patcy N of Rediff.com praised his dancing skills but was wary of his imitation of Shah Rukh Khan's acting style: "He does it well in some scenes, overdoes it in others."" -the explanation and quote is a little redundant
  • "In a review for the former, Namrata Joshi of Outlook termed Kapoor "colourless" and criticised his pairing with Rimi Sen" -means little if you don't explain what role/s he played and what the films were about
Breakthrough
  • "a whodunit " -a bit informal isn't it?
  • " Kapoor played one of the seven suspects in the murder of an heiress, and in the Priyadarshan-directed Chup Chup Ke, he played " -rep of "played"
  • "He also worked on creating a different physique for the two brothers, a process that took him a year to accomplish." -a bit vague, I gather one buff, the other a skinny weed? Some elaboration on weight loss/gain and the physiques might help.
2013
  • "Kapoor suffered an accident during the filming of R... Rajkumar when a chemical spilled on his back and hands leading to burn injuries" - how does one "spill a chemical on back and hands"? Could use a better explanation
Personal life
  • "Kapoor practices vegetarianism, and credits the author Brian Hines' book Life is Fair for influencing this lifestyle choice.[95][96] He supports the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals organisation through advertisement campaigns.[97][98]" -this should be in a different paragraph, the last paragraph could use some splitting and a little revamping. There's a mish mash of material in there, unrelated content should be in a new paragraph

Overall it's a solid article, but I think the prose lacks a little flair. I know it's difficult for the contemporary Indian actors though.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:37, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, Dr. Blofeld. All your comments have been addressed. Yeah, with the lack of literature available on contemporary actors, it's an uphill task to write about them. I guess we just have to make do with what is available. :) --Krimuk|90 (talk) 02:45, 17 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'm leaning towards support anyway.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:57, 27 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Blofeld! Let me know if I can improve it some more. :) --Krimuk|90 (talk) 12:03, 27 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Coordinator note: This nomination seems to have stalled and there is no consensus for promotion after several weeks. Therefore, I will be archiving the nomination. --Laser brain (talk) 11:56, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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