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The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot (talk) 19 September 2023 [1].

Ormond Beatty

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Nominator(s): PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 00:57, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The seventh president of Kentucky's Centre College (and the third such president to be the subject of an article I have brought to FAC), Ormond Beatty was impactful to Centre throughout his entire life. He was an alum, class of 1835, and got offered a job to teach there before he'd even graduated (after three years, no less). After studying at Yale for a year, he began teaching at Centre in 1836 and continued for the next thirty-two years. He was president pro tem for two years and then unanimously elected to the full job, which he kept for the next 18. After resigning, he went right back to teaching and died in Danville two years later. He also went to numerous Presbyterian General Assemblies, was a trustee for the Kentucky College for Women, and was a Smithsonian climate observer, among other things. This article is a little on the shorter side but I believe it covers the subject comprehensively, and I would be grateful for any and all feedback I can get! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 00:57, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

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  • File:Ormond_Beatty_in_1880.jpg: when and where was this first published and what is the author's date of death?
@Nikkimaria I changed the 1880 license to the same as the 1855 photo (though the photographer died in 1919), though neither are listed with dates or locations of publication. Should these images be replaced? PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:15, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Both currently include a tag indicating they were published before 1928. Can that be confirmed? If no, what is the earliest publication that can be confirmed? Nikkimaria (talk) 03:16, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Nikkimaria I don't think that I'll be able to find that information as I have no idea where or when (or if) they were first published, only the years that they were taken. As a result I've removed the 1855 one altogether and replaced the 1880 one with an engraving that was published in 1890 in the General Catalogue of the Centre College of Kentucky (see here for information and here (page 24 on the viewer) for the source material. If I end up finding publication info I might put the old ones back in but I'm perfectly satisfied with this image for now. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:57, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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  • "the fourth of five sons of Adam Beatty and Sarah Green" - were his parents not married? Or were they Adam Beatty and his wife Sarah (nee Green)......?
  • "...which began in 1870[2][16] and was dedicated on June 26, 1872" - subject seems to change from the construction of the building to the building itself
  • "Sarah Lewis Rochester, a relative of Nathaniel Rochester" - maybe Americans, or people from Kentucky specifically, know who Nathaniel Rochester was, but I personally have no idea, so could you put a qualifier before his name to indicate who he was/what he was known for.....?
  • "He was still a member of the Centre faculty at the time, having taught for two years after his resignation as president until his death" - given that we already know this paragraph is talking about his death, the last three words are redundant
  • Think that's all I got - nice work! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 15:27, 23 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    @ChrisTheDude Thank you for the review, all comments have been taken care of! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:59, 23 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:22, 23 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Harrias

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  • "..but changed to Centre College "at the last moment and by the merest chance". Says who? Attribute this quote inline.
  • According to the article, he returned to Centre in 1836, spent nine years in a position, and then in 1847 (eleven years after returning) switched to teaching mathematics. Is it possible to address this mismatch?
  • Generally, the sentence which starts "After spending nine years in this position.." is too long and tries to do too much; split it.
  • "..but spent only five years in this post before resuming teaching his original two subjects in 1852 for another 12 years." Per the MOS, for comparable numbers they should either both be numbers, or both be written out, not a mix. (Recommend switching 12 to twelve.)
  • "In 1863, Abraham Lincoln appointed him to be a visitor to the United States Military Academy in West Point, New York." What does this mean? He went for a day trip there? He studied there? He lectured there? Was Lincoln president at the time?
    • I am not sure - this is the source quote: "In 1863 he was appointed by President Lincoln one of the visitors to the Military Academy at West Point." I haven't found anything that expanded on what he actually did while he was there. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:29, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per the MOS, foreign-language text shouldn't use markup for achieve italics, but should use a relevant {{lang}} template.
  • "..became the first Centre president who was not a minister." I assume you mean a religious minister, but it is an ambiguous term, so please clarify.
  • "..and Sarah died after "a year or two"." Again, provide inline attribution.
  • "Beatty was a slaveowner, and the 1860 census lists him as having owned one slave." I think having this as a one sentence paragraph gives it undue precedence; I'd recommend blending it into one of the other paragraphs.
  • "He had been "suffering under an insidious disease" for "three or four years before".." More inline attribution needed.

Overall a nice little article. Harrias (he/him) • talk 13:48, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Harrias Thank you for the kind words and the review - all of your comments have been taken care of or responded to above! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:42, 24 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Harrias Just a courtesy ping if you get the chance to take another look at this at your nearest convenience! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:43, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Golden

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  • "Beatty involved himself" - I think the flow would improve if we wrote "Beatty also involved himself" since we've only discussed his educational work so far.
  • "This did not happen for some time, but William C. Young, son of former President John C. Young, was elected on June 19, 1888, to fill the role." - For some reason, this sentence does not flow well for me. I think it's because it doesn't connect well with the previous sentence. I suggest changing it to something like: "Although the process was protracted, William C. Young, son of former President John C. Young, was ultimately elected on June 19, 1888, to fill the role."
  • "prevent him from retiring from the college altogether" - Can we elaborate on this a little more? Why were they so determined to retain him at the college in any capacity? Was he truly that good of a professor/president/individual?
  • "Rochester, New York, founder" - Is the second comma supposed to be there? Also, I suggest changing it to "founder of Rochester, New York".

I have no further suggestions. The article was a pleasant read and is in excellent shape. Great job! — Golden talk 22:33, 28 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Golden: Thank you for the review! The first two points have been changed exactly as recommended (and I learned the meaning of the word "protracted"!). The third comment is a good question, and there really isn't a whole lot of reason given beyond what you guessed; the most detailed source quote I could find was this (FN 22 in that part of the article): "But the Trustees were unwilling that the institution should lose altogether the name and influence, the instructions and counsels, the fatherly concern and loving care of one who had been so long and so honorably identified with its history, and who had spared neither himself, nor his time, nor his money, in its behalf." I wasn't sure how to summarize this other than by saying that they didn't want him to leave, but I am very open to suggestions. I followed your suggestion in the fourth comment, though the comma has to stay as per MOS:GEOCOMMA. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:08, 29 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@PCN02WPS: Thank you for making the changes. Regarding the third point, perhaps we could include that quote or at least a portion of it? I believe it offers sufficient context to the sentence. — Golden talk 19:02, 29 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Golden I tried to paraphrase that as best I could and add it - does that sound alright to you? PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:00, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
That looks great, PCN02WPS. Happy to support. — Golden talk 16:02, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Source review

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No spotcheck needed; looking at formatting/reliability. MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 01:18, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

PCN02WPS, all done, very nice work on consistency! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 01:18, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@MyCatIsAChonk: Thanks for taking a look, everything has been fixed or responded to! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 18:52, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Support - by the way, if you get some time, I'd appreciate comments at this FAC. MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 21:03, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@MyCatIsAChonk I like that segment a lot, so I'd be happy to give that a look! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 15:52, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]


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