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The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 13 May 2019 [1].

Open event at the 42nd Chess Olympiad

Nominator(s): Kiril Simeonovski (talk) 10:04, 8 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the open event at the 42nd Chess Olympiad. Kiril Simeonovski (talk) 10:04, 8 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sources comments

Not a complete review yet. I see that access dates are missing from online references – this applies essentially to every reference in the list. The link to "official website" in ref 5 appears to be dead, and the link in ref 61 returns a 404 error message. There are likely to be other issues, but these problems should be dealt with first. Brianboulton (talk) 19:26, 9 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Done I have fixed those two links and checked that all other properly link to the cited texts before adding access dates as of today.--Kiril Simeonovski (talk) 07:51, 10 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

Suggest adding alt text. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:33, 13 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Could you please be more specific on the text you suggest to be added?--Kiril Simeonovski (talk) 13:53, 14 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Jens Lallensack

I think this is promising, but still has some way to go. The "Rounds" section is very good and well-balanced as far as I can see; there are still a number of prose errors though (see below for examples). The main issue is imho that the article is not as comprehensive as it could be.

The venue, and even the city in which it took place, are not mentioned in the text anywhere. I would mention country and city at the end of the first sentence already.
The organizer is not even mentioned? Was it FIDE?
Anything about price money? The Hamilton Russell Cup is only mentioned in a figure caption.
All in all, the article appears to lack a lot of background. I could think about a number of other things that I would have added, e.g. where spectators allowed? How were the games transmitted? Media coverage? etc. etc.
The second sentence of the lead mentions "Physically Disabled Chess Association (IPCA)" and others, but these are not repeated in the main text (the lead should only be the summary).
include Baadur Jobava of Georgia on board one, Vladimir Kramnik of Russia – why not state the board number for Kramnik as well?

Besides this, I found the following prose issues (correct me if I'm wrong, I'm not a native speaker):

The time control for every single game was 90 minutes per 40 moves, with an addition of 30 seconds per move and 30 minutes after the 40th move. – I think this is confusing. I would mention the increment in a separate sentence.
was allowed once again – here, I think you need to offer background information to explain the "once again".
The defending champions China were the third team with highest average rating and the only team besides Russia whose all players have rating higher than 2700. – Could you check for grammar here?
where 18-year old Jan-Krzysztof Dudawho who defeated Lázaro Bruzón to – the "who" is too much
The winless day for the strong player I think it needs to be "players"
put himself in an inferior position with a pawn down that was able to hold – "he" is missing
that left him without the huge advantage in an inferior position – remove "without the huge advantage"? Otherwise I don't understand it.
get an opening advantage in a game with solid – "a solid"
into a win against Ian Nepomniachtchi who won all seven games – "had won"?
missed a decisive tactic on move 26 that allow Jones to win the – "allowed"
played a novelty on move 16, that allowed him – remove comma
but the Greek tam struck back – "team"?
Azerbaijan and France scored 3-1 victories Turkmenistan and the Czech Republic – "against" missing
United States – not "the United States" (with article)?
No need to link countries multiple times. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 01:35, 14 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Done I have carefully dealt with every line you wrote and improved the article by adding two new sections on prizes, and media and spectators; expanding and re-arranging the one on participants; modifying the introduction to fully reflect the article's body; and correcting the mistakes that were found. I made a thorough search for the money prizes but could not find anything.--Kiril Simeonovski (talk) 13:49, 14 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, much better.

You mention the "playing hall", but which hall was this? Does it have a name? Might be worth to briefly introduce the hall with some background if suitable (but not necessary imo).
There are grammar errors in the new section (e.g., "that consisted of working stations equipped and information area equipped")
FIDE should also be introduced in the main text as well. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 01:08, 25 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Done I have added information about the venue but do not find it necessary to introduce FIDE since its parent article already contains general information about organisational details.--Kiril Simeonovski (talk) 10:56, 25 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Coord note

This has been open five weeks without attracting any support for promotion so I'm going to archive it. From the comments above it looks like this could benefit from GOCE assistance. After that you might consider the FAC mentoring scheme. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:53, 13 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 09:54, 13 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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