Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Meteorological history of Hurricane Florence/archive1

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The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 31 May 2020 [1].

Meteorological history of Hurricane Florence

Nominator(s): ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:06, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricane Florence in 2018 was one of two devastating hurricanes to strike the United States. Unlike Hurricane Michael, Florence was primarily a freshwater flooding event that is among the worst ever seen in The Carolinas. This article covers the meteorological conditions and progression of the hurricane from its origins over Africa to dissipation roughly three weeks later. The article follows the same structure as other meteorological history articles, being on the technical side as it's a special interest topic, but goes uniquely in-depth on the historic rainfall event. I believe this article is the single-most comprehensive coverage of the hurricane's meteorological aspects there is. Looking forward to hearing opinions and criticisms on it. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:06, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

Captions that aren't complete sentences shouldn't end in periods
Suggest adding alt text. Nikkimaria (talk) 21:51, 9 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Hurricane Noah

The opening sentence makes it sound like it spans from the meteorological history's inception rather than Florence's. Noah^Talk 22:34, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Add 'the' before "Open ocean". Noah^Talk 01:13, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
maximum sustained winds linked but pressure is simplified in the lead. Noah^Talk 01:13, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"With the system remaining close to the coastline it weakened slowly, eventually degrading to a tropical depression on September 16" Missing a comma Noah^Talk 01:13, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Do you mean trailing instead of training? Noah^Talk 01:13, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- "Training" is the correct terminology ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 21:57, 26 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Source needed for the deaths mentioned in the lead since they arent mentioned elsewhere in the article. Noah^Talk 01:13, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Easterly trade winds propelled the disturbance along a west to west-northwest trajectory" Was this at the same time as the PTC upgrade? Noah^Talk 01:37, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Pronounced banding features surrounded the circulation and the depression intensified to a tropical storm; accordingly the NHC assigned the system the name Florence." When did this happen and did the shear abate? Noah^Talk 01:37, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Persistent shear finally took its toll on Florence " This makes it seem as if the shear was moderate the entire time and Florence was had finally gave in. This isn't the case as you mentioned the shear was low a day before. Noah^Talk 01:37, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Link to satellite imagery. Noah^Talk 01:37, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The system rapidly achieved Category 4 intensity by 16:00 UTC," Could you replace rapidly with a synonym? Noah^Talk 01:37, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"its peak intensity with winds of 150 mph (240 km/h) and a pressure of 937 mbar (hPa; 27.76 inHg) at 18:00 UTC" 1800 UTC when? Noah^Talk 01:37, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

-I will add more later... I got pulled away by basement flooding again. sigh... Noah^Talk 22:34, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@FAC coordinators: I'm going to withdraw this nomination. I don't have the time or energy to work on this nor do I see things getting easier in the near future. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 03:18, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, tks -- I hope things improve and we see you back before too long. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 03:27, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been withdrawn, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 03:27, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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