Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/John Henry Cound Brunt/archive1
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- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was not promoted 15:06, 14 August 2007.
The article is already GA approved. The person is an interesting, heroic character, and one who is deserving of Featured Article status. -- JediLofty User ¦ Talk 18:44, 1 n7 July 2007 (UTC)
Strongly Oppose I'm do not believe this article meets FA criteria.
- 1a: Poor verb usage with regards to consistent tense. Example:"The actions that won him the Victoria Cross exemplified this behaviour, as despite being wounded he single-handedly held off enemy troops, allowing his men to reach safety." is an awkward sentence with shifts in verb tense throughout. It is also passive voice, which is frowned upon. Numerous copyedit problems: unclosed parenthesis, improper capitalization ("North"), incomplete locations ("Lincoln"...Lincoln where? Nebraska?).
- 1b) Neglects major facts and details.
- 2. Numerous violations of WP:DATE throughout (tip: search for everything with "19" in it and you'll find most of them. Please also check WP:BIO for additional information.
- 2a) The lead section seems woefully inadequate and does not address a third of his life (also omitted in the body), though it is sized appropriately for an article of this size.
- 2c) It lacks a substantial table of contents and size (there simply isn't enough here to be considered a featured article).
- 2d) Inconsistent citation formats. In addition, citations should be used at the end of a section from the same source, not every sentence. Example: Blah blah blah.[1] Blah blah blah.[1] Blah blah blah.[1] should be Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah.[1] In addition, this article seems to take almost everything from one source (11 of 13 complete paragraphs from one source!). Please find more and balance this out. Last sentence is unreferenced.
- 3 Only a single image? For an FA?!? Surely there has to be a picture of something to illustrate this man's life. How about the book you reference? No pictures there? A unit logo? A map of where he lived? fought? died?
- 4 The length is woefully inadequate. For a person who died at only 22 years of age, 9 years of his life are covered in only 3 brief sentences?!?
In short, it is an quick summary of a book and the life of a hero with a few other sources thrown in, but it is not written up to Wikipedia standards. — BQZip01 — talk 17:24, 8 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Oppose—MOS breaches, overlinked, poorly written. Tony 11:16, 14 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.