Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Irghiz River Skirmish/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Buidhe via FACBot (talk) 4 May 2023 [1].

Irghiz River Skirmish

Nominator(s): ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 15:49, 30 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

To tell you the truth, I can't tell you very many certainties about this. To start with, we don't know precisely when it took place. Because of that, we don't really know where it happened or really why. We sort of know who was there, but we don't know all of them for certain, or how well they succeeded in their roles and orders (which we naturally don't fully know about). In total, about all that I can tell you is that there was a battle in the early 13th century between a Mongol army and a Muslim one which would help to nudge the course of world history down a completely different path, for better or worse. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 15:49, 30 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

My only comment on an initial read is that I think the article would benefit from a tiny bit more context as to who some of the people are. You don't mention that Genghis Khan was the ruler of the Mongols anywhere in the article. It would also be worth mentioning that Jochi was Genghis's son and Jebe his top general, as currently these two names are dropped in with nothing to explain why it would be noteworthy that they were (or weren't) present. That's all I got...... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 19:14, 30 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

A very good point, ChrisTheDude. Resolved to my satisfaction—what do you think? ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 22:53, 30 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Could you add the same context to the body as well as the lead? -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:28, 1 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@FAC coordinators: I would like to withdraw this nomination; RL has got in the way, and I'll be mostly off-wiki for the next few weeks. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 20:07, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been withdrawn, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. (t · c) buidhe 20:11, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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