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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 04:25, 3 February 2008.

Gifu, Gifu

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I'm nominating this article for featured article because, over the past year, I believe that it has covered all the necessary topics with appropriate references to become a featured article about a Japanese city. I've gone through peer review on WikiProject Japan. (Self-nomination) Douggers (talk) 06:16, 20 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for moving the picture. I don't think the whitespace was coming up in my Firefox browser. Douggers (talk) 01:07, 24 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for the information regarding the pictures. I've replaced "GifuUniv logo.png" with a picture of the hospital on the university's campus to remove any questions of fair use about the logo. As for "GifuFlagArtAIDS.jpg," I uploaded in last summer in good faith. I've blocked it out with <!-- --> until its status can be determined or an appropriate replacement can be found. Are there any other concerns preventing this article from reaching Featured Article status? Douggers (talk) 01:07, 24 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose. I have concerns about the quality of the existing citations and the lack of citation sfor many statements. The prose is mostly adequate, but it is not compelling. I have highlighted a few especially clunky sentences here, but I recommend geting someone who hasn't looked at the article to try a copyedit. Karanacs (talk) 03:48, 1 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Last sentence in first paragraph of History section is a little clunky. Can it be reworked a bit?
    • First paragraph of Sengoku period section is not organized well. I'd move the first sentence to be the last sentence.
    • It's usually best not to start a paragraph (or even a sentence) with a quote. The first sentence in Sengoku period section could be "Gifu's location in the center of Japan led to the phrase "control Gifu and you control Japan" during the Sengoku period (15th to 17th century)."
    • Reading that first sentence about controlling Gifu made me ask..."made it a desirable location" for what? to launch an attack?
    • This sentence is clunky: "As Nobunaga had a vision to unite all of Japan, much like Dōsan did, Nobunaga rebelled and overthrew Dōsan in the mid-sixteenth century, much like Dōsan did to his retainer"
    • I expected to read more about people "controlling Gifu to control Japan". I am not familiar with Japanese history, so it may need more context to help explain the cute.
    • Need a citation for: "With Gifu being easily accessible to much of Japan through the Nakasendō, the area continued to prosper."
    • Need a non breaking space between a number and its qualifier/unit (ex: 245 dead)
    • What does the municipal street car service have to do with the earthquake? Perhaps these ought to be different sentences?
    • Need to have a metric conversion for acres
    • There are a couple of instances where a sentence has a string of numbers, with some spelled out and some as numerals. Please be consistent within a sentence.
    • This sentence is clunky: "Additionally, there is public space at the top of the building, which will allow residents a second 360-degree view of Gifu,[22] with the first one being the view from Gifu Castle."
    • Need a citation for " For a long period of time it rivaled Tokyo and Osaka to lead the Japanese fashion industry"
    • Need a citation for "Over the past decade, though, as Gifu's fashion industry has declined steeply, the city has begun looking for other industries to prop up the local economy."
    • Need a citation for " has become a prosperous area for many metalworking, mold and die, and parts subcontractors.'
    • Need a citation for "Its ease of access to neighboring areas using public transportation and highways has allowed companies to set up many factories and facilities in the area."
    • Need a citation for "Approximately 30,000 fireworks are set off at each festival, with crowds of 400,000 and 120,000 visitors, respectively."
    • Need a citation for "Each set of displays revolves around a different theme (such as the beauty of Gifu or AIDS Awareness) or are created by specific group of persons (for example, local school students or local artists)."
    • Need to convert m to ft or yds (329 m)
    • Need a citation for "Also, its close location to the Nagaragawa Convention Center and various high class hotels make it a popular area for guests."
    • Full dates in references need to be wikilinked
    • Not all of the references have publishers listed
    • As a general rule, you should not use anothe rwiki as a source (ref 12)
    • I see a few sources that don't look reliable (refs 13, 20)
    • I'm especially concerned that the vast majority of the sources are self-published. Can you find more information in third-party sources? That would include books, newspapers, and magazines. The sources can be in Japanese; I know it will be difficult to find English-language sources for a smaller town.

Good luck! Karanacs (talk) 03:48, 1 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. Several reasons/concerns include: 1) References are terrible (e.g. nos. 2, 4,6, 11, etc. What are these?). Non-English references need to identify language. How is http://www.geocities.jp/yuutarou19800126/ a reliable source? 2) Weasel words, e.g. “Some have long histories”. 3) Unprofessional prose quality. 4) Why is there an external link to a bus company? Much work is needed. Ɛƚƈơƅƅơƚɑ talk 19:38, 1 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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