Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Ain't No Other Man/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by GrahamColm 00:42, 23 July 2013 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Ain't No Other Man

Nominator(s): HĐ (talk) 03:21, 9 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because... I believe it's suitable for a featured article. HĐ (talk) 03:21, 9 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from WikiRedactor

We have some shady links to be addressed.

done

I don't think the sampling controversy is a long enough section to warrant its own heading.

It works per "Irreplaceable"

"Background and recording",a "Development and writing", and "Composition" cover a lot of the same material. You should clean up the duplicate information and maybe merge the first two sections into a renamed "Background and development".

doing

I prefer the title "Commercial performance" over "Chart performance" to differentiate it from the "Charts" table sections below.

done

Misspelling of Aguilera in the music video section.

done

"Usage in media" is not long enough to need its own section, merge it with (maybe?) "Commercial performance".

done I've merged it with "Live performances and cultural impact"

The article as a whole may also benefit from a WP:COPYEDIT. WikiRedactor (talk) 15:20, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I think it's just a slight c/e — HĐ (talk) 04:46, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Status

About.com is not a reliable source for FA, so it should be removed (I would also suggest replacing, but since it's opinions, that cannot be done.)
This article really needs a WP:COPYEDIT before going any further. A select few examples of issues include:
- "Production was took by Aguilera..."
- "...with Jordan Laws credited as assistant."
- ""Ain't No Other Man" received generally acclaim from music critics."

— Statυs (talk, contribs) 04:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose: This article has not been adequately prepared for FAC. Issues with prose and sourcing are readily found. Please withdraw this and re-nominate when these issues are fixed. Some random examples:

Sourcing to About.com as noted above.
"Bill Lamp for About.com said that the single also combines saxophone." Combines with...?
"Several critics noted that the mixture was good" Mixture?
"Jody Rosen from Entertainment Weekly found out that the jazzy melody from the track suited Aguilera perfectly" Use of "found out" is awkward and informal.
Grammar: "Aguilera's vocal range on the track span from A♭3 to C5"
Grammar: "Dorian Lyskey of The Guardian called the beats of the song 'brassy' and has the same 'aerobic oomph' as Beyoncé's 'Crazy in Love'"

These are all in just one section. Please get someone to copyedit this. --Laser brain (talk) 05:10, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Graham Colm (talk) 15:38, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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