User talk:Yourstrulyy

This user is a student editor in Carleton_University/Analyzing_Cinema,_Gender,_and_Sexuality_(Fall_2019) .

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Hello, Yourstrulyy, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:44, 13 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Nnegest Likké

Major revisions needed.

Good start on a first draft!
Currently, the primary issue is that the draft has not quite reached the 500 words of new prose minimum.
Ensure that all your factual claims are cited (i.e., the Education section, and first sentences in the Biography and Career sections). Typically, one citation per sentence is required.
This draft relies primarily on one promotional source, which does not count towards notability. Find more sources to support your article (and please get in touch if you need assistance with this!)
Minor issues: Claim your filmmaker on the Wikiedu page so that no one else in the class writes about her as well, and use the standard Wikipedia headers for your article's sub-sections.

CropMilk (talk) 15:36, 23 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I have some added notes - the sources definitely need to be improved. You can use reviews of her films for this, but you should ideally be looking for articles about the filmmaker. Also, make sure that you are careful to attribute any claims or opinions to the person(s) making them. Rather than writing out all of her work in prose format, it's fine to leave the list of her films as is - a prose section about her films should give insight that can't be derived from a simple listing of what she's made and when. It should have information about things like the production process, their reception, her filmmaking process in general, and so on - sort of an expansion of the career section, which can be just a summary of what jobs she's worked and a general overview of her career.

Finally, make sure that you don't use promotional/PR or opinion tones - be careful of phrasing. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:24, 24 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sourcing

Here are some sources I found:

[1], Interview
[2], book mention, may be more info in there
[3], journal article, came up in a JSTOR search. Not sure what's in it, though, since I don't have access
[4], same
[5], same
[6] Critic reviews for Phat Girlz
news story
[7], review of Ben and Ara
[8], news article
[9] award for Ben and Ara

I'll add more as I find them. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:20, 30 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

peer review

hello! Overall, not bad for your draft. Lot's of great content, some good sources. I made a few spelling and grammar edits, but overall your spelling and grammar are great. I have a few notes for improvement. First, in the early life and education section you say "Likké had the opportunity of travelling to Europe, East, West and Islamic North in Africa,[2] where she experienced various ways of life.". I would suggest expanding on this idea. You state that she had the opportunity to travel. Why? Did she travel for work? For pleasure? and what do you mean when you say "various ways of life". What did she experience and why is it relevant? If possible, try to ensure that you are using enough academic sources. Good luck!

--Purpleoctopus (talk) 22:13, 4 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review (Gossipgirl123456)

This article has great specifics on the filmmaker's background, nationality and early life, as well as nominations and awards. I liked that you were able to write about her early career as a filmmaker as well. However, I feel that the content has lots of grammatical errors, mainly punctuation, so I'm assuming you maybe aren't finished yet. There seem to be unfinished thoughts and content gaps. I would recommend that you read over each of your sections and double check the grammar and organization of your paragraphs prior to finishing your draft. In addition, I've noticed that you have included multiple different citations for the same source, as 3, 4, 9 and 11 are all the exact same resource; for footnotes, you generally use the same number for the same source. I think Wikipedia will allow you to do this easily, just reuse a source instead of making a new citation each time, or else the references are improper! Also, I would suggest that you double check the validity of some of the sources you chose as it seems that many of them might not be secondary sources. Overall, I think that this article is in need of some improvements. However, I think that the break down of the sections are great, and I think that you have enough resources to spruce up your article. Your writing on the filmmaker is very interesting! Good luck :)