User talk:Yellow1830/sandbox
Hi, I read your wikipedia article. Overall, the article is interesting and well written. The article includes enough reading materials and links to other wikipedia articles, which was very helpful for me when reading it. The following is what I thought you could do to improve your article. About introduction, it might be better to explain more about section one because so far there is only one sentence introducing the section. You could have information such as when the protest started, where it was and so on as a brief introduction. The other thing you can do is to put an external link at the end. I found that there is an independent wikipedia article about 'FeesMustFall' that you explain in section three. By setting up the wikipedia links to these specific protests, the readers will be able to know more about protests in Africa.
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[edit]Overall, your article is great. The article is written well with a range of language. Additionally, the article is structured nicely, beginning broad and then following it up with specific examples relevant to your topic. This also helps the article flow smoothly as a whole as opposed to sections segregated from one another. The use of hyperlinks to other articles really helps the reader gain an understanding of the events and their context. You have used a good range of sources, many are academic too which is good. Referencing of these sources is more or less spot on bar the one issue with the date that Wikipedia flagged. To improve this article, I would ensure that there is as much detail as possible, which you have already done a good job of. Furthermore, I think your overview can be a little brief at times - I think that a sentence or two briefly outlining what you say in section 1 rather than stating the sections title may improve it. You did this well for the other sections. It could be any information from key eras/dates of increased protests or geographical hotspots within Africa etc. Great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by AnonCheikou (talk • contribs) 19:10, 28 November 2021 (UTC)