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[edit]Yan.yiw, good start, I made a bunch of edits, especially at the top, to demonstrate my suggestions below for for moving forward.
- The references you have at the bottom should be associated with specific claims in your prose, throughout the article.
- Can you find more reputable sources? Perhaps AmandaRR123 or LibrarianBTeam could help.
- I've fixed many of the typos but some remain.