User talk:Wrodr041/sandbox

Prof Garcia's Comments

You have done such a great job, Wilson! Wow! I think you are off to an exceptional start and that you are well on your way to success in this course. =) Keep up the great work! Alfgarciamora (talk) 13:42, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Week 6: Hi Wilson, I was surprised to not see any more work added for week 6. Is everything okay? Alfgarciamora (talk) 12:47, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

@Wrodr041: You've done a tremendous job with this page, Wilson! You went out and found a ton of stuff on the topic and have really done a great job putting it all together. I'm excited to see the legal implications that you are investigating right now. At that point, you will probably be done with all the research you need to do. Add that section and then turn to formatting the page so that it is as polished as possible. You've done an great job, Wilson! Alfgarciamora (talk) 20:26, 4 November 2016 (UTC)

Diana Bolivar Peer Review

Good Morning!! When i clicked on your article to skim it i was super intrigued by the topic name, i wasn't exactly sure what "Consanguineous Marriage" was at first (I had to look it up on my own) so yes you have an example of the cousins getting married but i think that even in your sandbox you should have the definition right in the first sentence or paragraph. Would this be considered Incest? what is the difference between both?? I agree on the title change "Changes" sounds biased, kind of forced in one direction, in the direction of change. Your article sounds more informative and neutral.

As for your section "Epidemiological features" it might be a bit graphic but you could used examples of physically deformed new born babies and mentally challenged new borns that were birthed by same family members. Talk about the possibility, higher risk, and chance of child deformity if parents continue to reproduce this way. Talk why this happens, when 2 DNA strands, since they're so similar, end up no properly duplicating. Does this mean if they have 3 kids will they all be prone to having health and mental problems?

In the section "Places where it's taboo and places where it isn't, and why" is this "right" still being fought for? are there current day examples of people wanting to freely marry within their own family? i think this section of taboo should be mixed with the "Religion" section. Kind of like two birds with one stone. Explain the rights and wrong to this (neutrally of course). Are there interviews of these people and do they say that they believe in a God? Or do they not believe in anything. Maybe cite personal books of people telling their story, does national Geographic talk about this specific type of taboo? and are their interviews or reality tv shows that make fun of, talk about, or inform us about this? Overall, great sub topics and sections, fair amount of links, citations and references. @Wrodr041: --Dianaboli18 (talk) 16:16, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey Diana! Thank you so much for all of this, every part of it is really helpful! For epidemiological features, I've now talked about an increased risk of autosomal recessive disorders in these marriages, but there are a some discrepancies between studies since they're mostly based on small population close-case studies. What you said about "two birds with one stone" was a good idea, and I've now named the category "Social stigma and acceptance". The interviews and personal accounts of other people were also a great idea, especially since one of them had recently gone viral on Facebook and seen a great deal of hate. Also risked jail time. @Dianaboli18: --Wrodr041 (talk) 03:18, 26 October 2016 (UTC)