User talk:Veviillescas/sandbox
TA Comments:
In-text citations: yes
Professional tone: yes
Paraphrasing real science: yes
Grammar and spelling: Some minor grammar issues. For instance, the sentence “… are some of the things that the typical questions he would be asking himself” could be rewritten much more readably as “… are some of the areas he explores.”
Links to other wiki articles: yes
Score: 19/20
Peer Review:
Hi, I was assigned to review your wikipedia article, so here are a few of my thoughts. I thought you had a good overview in your first section of the general focuses of Professor Levine's work. It's often pretty difficult to get a general grasp of a scientist's research since academics tend to have very specific, complicated subjects, but your introduction does so well, although the section on theory of collision-induced dissociation is a little difficult to follow for someone who's not already familiar with the subject.
You have quite a few grammatical errors, particularly in the first section of your article. In the first sentence when you say "he is interested on how chemicals react", the "on" should be "in". The second sentence is a bit confusing, particularly the part "are some of the things that the typical questions he would be asking himself," so you may want to restructure it. "He became interested how these reactions occur" should have an "in" after "interested". When you mention "the academia" it would make more sense to say he's considered a pioneer by academics. In the first sentence of the Theory of Collision section, "has showed" should be "has shown."
Also I noticed that some sections of your work are quite similar to a certain article online about Professor Levine, so before the assignment is officially graded you may want to make the writing a bit more your own and bring in multiple sources. The same goes for the section on Theory of Collision and Levine's research paper on the subject. It might be better to give more of a general overview of the topic rather than very specific aspects from his paper. The Awards, Membership, and Media sections look good as is, and it's great that you already linked some phrases to other wikipedia pages and did in-text citations. Overall you have a well organized page going.
GANSKI, CLAIRE Peer Review Score: 20/20
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