User talk:Vasileios Kreouzis
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[edit]Hello, Vasileios Kreouzis, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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Neuromorality
[edit]Neuromorality is the study of brain structure and function, relating to moral cognition, perception, and behavior.
Peer Review
[edit]Sure, you can peer review my article. MB193
Peer review for your Neuromorality article
[edit]Based on the comprehensive contents of your article, I did not expect for it to not already exist in Wikipedia! Despite the exciting amount of content you've generated, there are quite a few grammatical errors and word choices that stray from the desired language of Wikipedia.
Firstly, you'll want to bold "Neuromorality" since it is the topic of your article. The second sentence needs to do away with the utilize and perhaps be reworded as "Researchers use investigative tools such as..." and go on from there. Many of your headers and subheaders have their first letters capitalized, which is great for literature reviews and the like but not consistent with Wikipedia formatting. Consider capitalizing the first letter of each header/subheader but lowercasing the first letter of the subsequent word (i.e. Brain Lesions -> Brain lesions). It is interesting that quite a few of your sentences to end with 3 or more sources cited. Are all of these sources used for the one sentence(s)?
There seems to be an error in your citation style where the source is cited more than once (i.e.[2][2][2][2][2][2]). It would be important to add a References section at the bottom of your article so that all of your sources have a place to stay. If you have other topics related to this one, a "See also" section would benefit as well.
The Forensic Neuroscience section has two anecdotal examples that relate to your article. However, these could be given their own "Society and culture" section (see Parkinson's disease or ALS) so that the "Forsenic Neuroscience section does not suffer. Alternatively, at least consider moving the anecdotes to the end of that sub-section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Redhood1 (talk • contribs) 20:24, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]First of all, this is such an interesting topic and it was fun to learn about! What I like about this article was definitely the way it was structured in a very logical order. This allowed for smooth transition into a seemingly complicated topic. Starting from the basics of the anatomy of the brain, to how it relates to functional order/disorder, and how that can be used in clinical and forensic settings was well thought out and organized. In terms of formatting and grammar there are places that need to be acknowledged. The topic, “ Neuromorality" , should be bolded in your first sentence. There also seems to be an issue with the citation. There seems to be a repetition (ex., [8][8][8]…)which should be addressed before the article is moved to wikipedia.
There was a sentence in particular that was confusing to understand, and could probably use some more explanation , "People with psychopathy appear to have defects in moral judgement, but not in moral reasoning”. As someone who is not too familiar with this topic, it confuses me that reasoning and judgment are seen as completely separate entities.
Grammar:
First paragraph:
an* emerging field
Methods of Investigation:
Excerpt- To analyze the neuromoral circuit scientists perform experimental paradigms utilizing fMRI
Suggestion: Scientists use fMRI to analyze…
Clinical Neuropsychiatry:
Excerpt- The study of brain areas that relate to morality can be utilized...
Suggestion- Areas of the brain that relate to morality can be used...
Functional Order:
change imoral to immoral*
Forensic Neuroscience:
Excerpt- …can provide insights
Suggestion- ...can provide insight — Preceding unsigned comment added by MB193 (talk • contribs) 01:29, 16 April 2017 (UTC)
Yes, you may peer review
[edit]No need to ask, you may please review mine. Thank you in advance.