User talk:VJOSHI22/sandbox
Draft feedback
[edit]Plan is very well thought out - good job.
Writing is well done. My only suggestion would be to avoid an informal tone which you sometimes slip into, for example in this sentence:
"This makes mutations in the p53 gene highly deleterious and, in fact, some mutations in the p53 gene have a selective advantage for a broad range of different cancers."
Getting rid of "in fact" would improve the tone of this sentence. Also avoid starting out a sentence this way; this sounds like it should be a continuation of the last sentence, so maybe find a way to join them together with a semicolon so they sound a bit more cohesive. An updated version could look like this:
"The tumour suppressor protein, p53 is vital to normal cell function and growth; this makes mutations in the p53 gene highly deleterious. Certain mutations in the p53 gene result in a selective advantage for a broad range of different cancers."
Overall great start!