User talk:VAFeo

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Ryan Kesler

There are a couple reasons in particular that I had in mind for reverting your edits. I thought "uncanny" qualified as a peacock term (words that are unnecessarily dressy) and should have been simplified. Secondly, because the lead is meant to be a summary of the article's content, I thought that the term "agitating" was much more concise than what you had written. My understanding of the term "agitator" in hockey is someone that typically performs the extracurricular activity you described.

However. I understand where you're coming from and you have a point. I agree that this aspect of his game could be expanded in the article. What I would propose is a "Playing style" section that would afford more detail in the extracurricular stuff he is known for, among other things. Many hockey-related "Good" and "Featured" articles have such a section and Kesler's does not. You can look at Roberto Luongo and Pavel Bure for examples of good "Playing style" sections.

On a related topic, if you're interested in editing more Canucks and hockey-related articles, you should check out and join WP:Hockey and WP:CANUCKS. Cheers! Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 07:20, 17 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]