User talk:Tykam993/sandbox
Review of new article Slow Motion Celebrity
[edit]Your new article is looking good so far. The biggest thing that it is missing is some sources. Make sure that you can find some sources to back up your information, otherwise the information probably does not belong on Wikipedia. The timeline for the existing band members looks really cool.
Holbrook.t (talk) 20:51, 19 February 2017 (UTC)
Review of Unit 2 Draft
[edit]I think it's really cool that you're writing a Wikipedia article for a band, it'll be a great way to get more information on their music out for anyone who looks them up. The timeline is probably the best part since it presents the bands history in a very clear and easy to understand graphic. I also think this is written in a very 'Wikipedia appropriate' tone since you only discuss the facts about the band and their music with no obvious bias towards or against them.
My only recommendation would be to make sure your sources are both credible and long-lasting. I noticed at the top you have saved a source from the groups Facebook page, but if they every delete the page or delete the post then the citation suddenly becomes useless. If you could cite magazines or websites with credibility in the music industry (i.e. Rolling Stone) then that would give your article a lot more support when it gets posted. I know for bands that aren't mainstream that can be difficult to do, but I think it's a point worth considering.
- Adel A. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Adel Attari (talk • contribs) 14:31, 21 March 2017 (UTC)
Review Of Unit 2 Assignment
[edit]What does the article (or section) do well?
-i think your article does a great job setting a foundation for the future. It lays out the information in a way that will be able to be added to and updated easily.
What changes would you suggest overall?
- I like the idea behind the timeline a lot. It provides a nice view of who was in the band at what time. However, If there is another way to display that might look more modern it might be worth checking out.
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?
-Continue adding content/further info to the dated events
Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!
-I am following the same timeline-like format for my work so this gives me something good to compare it to.