User talk:Twtnyc

Online personal training

A tag has been placed on Online personal training, requesting that it be speedily deleted from Wikipedia. This has been done under the criteria for speedy deletion, because the article seems to be blatant advertising which only promotes a company, product, group, service or person and would need to be fundamentally rewritten in order to become an encyclopedia article. Please read the general criteria for speedy deletion, particularly item 11, as well as the guidelines on spam.

If you can indicate why the subject of this article is not blatant advertising, you may contest the tagging. To do this, please add {{hangon}} on the top of the page and leave a note on the article's talk page explaining your position. Please do not remove the speedy deletion tag yourself, but don't hesitate to add information to the article that would help make it encyclopedic, as well as adding any citations from reliable sources to ensure that the article will be verifiable. Feel free to leave a note on my talk page if you have any questions about this. Oyster guitarist 18:38, 24 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Actually I do not have the abillity to delete pages cause I am not an administaritor but I can put tags on articals so they can be reviewed by them and they can decide weather to delete the page. Oyster guitarist 18:54, 24 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I am an administrator, I decided to give a few days for improving the article, see the changed tag on the page and my comment on the article talk page.. 19:05, 24 July 2007 (UTC)

I performed some surgery on the article and would love some feedback to see if i'm on the right track? Please advise? Twtnyc 19:40, 24 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

WP articles are not signed. Nobody owns them. You are recognized as the contributor of what you write, but only on the basis of what is on the page history, & only to the extent that you identify yourself on your user page. WP is not advertising Please read WP:COI and WP:CORP. DGG (talk) 05:42, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

As for the article, I continue to find it insufficiently descriptive. It is supposed to describe what the process is, not advocate for it. This is an encyclopedia. What would an article in the Brittanica say about the subject if they had one? One thing I can tell, you, they would not use the word "you"--and neither does any WP article! please read what I said on the article talk page. DGG (talk) 05:46, 25 July 2007 (UTC) And, checking the references, these are hopelessly general. You need to find references from published material talking about the practice of online training. I see nothing in any of them referring to a certificate or accreditation in this particular specialty. You also need to think of a title to differentiate it from online training in other things , such as how to use computers. DGG (talk) 07:35, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The reason I'm writing the article is because there ISNT anything substantive on the practice of online personal training. I am a most credible reference for the information since I've been training people online since 1996 (mind body soul network)... The references that I used are the only ones available that distinguish a personal trainer as being qualified. At present the fitness industry hasn't addressed this as a separate issue, there ISNT a certificate in this particular specialty. I can tighten the style of the article that's not a problem, I've just never written in this manner before, so it'd be nice if you temper the frustrated tone of your response? This area of fitness training specialty is new, and my motive behind bothering with wikipedia was to give it some weight/legitimacy and establish some base of reference for the development of protocols and standards. So delete it if you're not willing to let me develop it further...and if I'm able to develop it further helpful suggestions are appreciatedTwtnyc 16:37, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Final edit is done - I couldn't figure out how to change the title to 'Online Fitness Training' - suggestions welcomeTwtnyc 17:18, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I moved it to Online Fitness Training. Oyster guitarist 21:59, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]