User talk:Tshaffer/Tshaffer92Draft
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[edit]i thought the flow of your paper was very good but one thing. It would of made your paper a little better if you put your quotes in quotations so i (the reader) can tell what is yours and what is being quoted.
your section header is correct
your breaks in between paragraphs are well placed and smooth.
your internal links work.
and your inline citation is good all i would suggest is the quotations.
your article seems to be based on just information making it pretty neutral by nature.
your sources may be good but i would feel a little more comfortable if you used a journal or something that has been reviewed for authenticity.
other than that i think you have a very good rough draft.