User talk:Trinity17
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[edit]Hello, Trinity17, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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Peer Review (Adam Sgro)
[edit]Hi Trinity17,
I read your outline and I found it very interesting. I just wanted to leave you with some feedback!
I was searching on google scholar for some additional information on your fungus. I came upon an interesting article ("Influence of Phospholipids on Growth, Sporulation and Virulence of the Endoparasitic Fungi Drechmeria coniospora, Verticillium balanoides and Harposporium anguillulae in Liquid Culture", DOI:10.1111/j.1439-0434.1989.tb00649.x) that discusses external effects of sporulation. As sporulation is a very important part of fungal life cycles I think this would be worth discussing, and could be added to your physiology section.
I would suggest changing the title of "Growth and Pathology" to just "Pathology" as you are not discussing normal growth in this section.
You discuss the use of your fungus as a biocontrol agent in great detail! I suggest that you also further elaborate on why this is important. Does it affect crops for human consumption? Are nematodes a great economical burden, as in do they cause a lot of crop loss? What is the overall benefit and goal of using your fungus as a biocontrol agent? Additionally some of your points in the "Physiology" section seem to make more sense in the "Pathology" section. For example this portion of one of your points, "...that stick to the pharynx of the organisms under attack, usually a Nematode or more commonly known as roundworms" probably belongs in the "Pathology" section. You may want to reorganize your article and add a section on "Pest Control", this might help organize your thought in a more clear fashion for the reader. In this new section you would have all of your discussion on nematodes in one area so that the reader is better able to understand the concepts.
In the "Habitat and Ecology" section you briefly mention the use of antidotes in order for your fungus not to affect farm animals. I think you should describe a few of these antidotes, and their mechanism of action on your fungus. This would hopefully tie back to your physiology section, as you could describe the physiological process (that you described in the previous section) being affected by the antidote thus inhibiting the growth of your fungus.
I also think this point "Feeds on both glucose and yeast when grown on agar plates in lab, and grows much slower on glucose induced plates when compared to yeast agar plates" does not belong in the "History" section, but belongs in the "Physiology" section.
You have a lot of very detailed and interesting facts in this article, I would just change the structure and ensure that all your facts indeed belong in the section you have put them in. For the reader it will be more clear if the points are in their correct sections, because if someone wants to understand the physiology of your fungus they should just be able to go to the "Physiology" section for a complete understanding.
Great work! Adam Adamsgro (talk) 01:05, 29 October 2016 (UTC)