User talk:Tjr128/sandbox
Peer Review
[edit]Hi this is Tammy. I read your article and see a lot of efforts from you. Just some friendly comments here:
1. For the first sentence, what do you mean by “%make changes”?
2. I made some grammar changes such as “The Exnet language is spoken…”
3. I know this is a draft. Just a reminder in the lead section and the whole article there should not be irrelevant information such as “I intended to...” According to Editing Wikipedia, “A good lead summarizes the entire article by briefly covering all important aspects of the topic.” I know it’s hard so far but try to point out what you have summarized based on materials you gathered, and abandon what you mentioned in the lead section if it can be really hard to clarify.
4. I changed the order of references to be alphabetized. (APA style) I am sorry if that makes you inconvenient!
5. I made a title for each section. If you don’t like it just delete them! Tammy083 (talk) 16:23, 5 April 2017 (UTC)
Hi this is Matt. Just try to add hyperlinks when referring to other languages or countries! (Matt spiegel (talk) 14:57, 2 May 2017 (UTC))