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[edit]The history of aphasia is an important factor to consider when researching what aphasia is. - Maybe reword to something like "to better understand what aphasia is, it is important to know the history."
By knowing more about the history of a disease - I would call it a disorder.
the (better of a chance) - "better chance"
you have at ruling out potential misnomers of the disease and possibly discovering new ways of thinking about (ways to use therapy) - "treatment"
Although the cause for most aphasias are known, the (best way to help someone to recover, however, is not) - "the best way to recover is unknown"
Treatment and rehabilitation are the only ways currently to help those with aphasia, but by knowing the history, knowing what has been tried, and what has been tested can help us in the future to search for new ways to help treat aphasia. Aphasia was non-medically described from texts such as the Bible, and the writings of Homer, however not much has been researched regarding non-medical texts. Medically however, speechlessness was described as an incorrect prognosis and did not assume that there were underlying language complications (Eling & Whitaker). The first medical documents dating back into the late 19th century contain early descriptions of aphasia. Broca and his colleagues were some of the first to write about aphasia, but Wernicke was the first credited to have written extensively about aphasia being a disorder that contained comprehension difficulties (Boller). Despite claims of who reported on aphasia first, it was F. J. Gall that gave the first full description of aphasia after studying wounds to the brain, as well as his observation of speech difficulties resulting from vascular lesion (Riese). - These few sentences provide great information to include for the history of aphasia, maybe just include more detail.
Specifically, primary progressive aphasia, a more rare type of aphasia, does not have a very clear history. In the case of this type of aphasia, only a few documents containing patient records contain linguistic and neuropsychological data, but little to no data about an actual prognosis (Le Rhun, Richard, Pasquier). - This seems randomly added. It needs more detail to tie into your section
- If this is all going under the "History" section, some of it does not seem relevant. Such as the sentence starting "although the cause for most aphasias is known..."
- Maybe include more information about the earliest diagnosis of aphasia, as well as a section on the history of treatment may be relevant.
- The in-text citations should have the year as well as the author.
- Linked citations were not included in the draft, so I could not evaluate quality of sources.
- This seems like it will be a great addition to the page! The "Aphasia" page does need more info on history, so there is a lot of potential for improvements/additions to this section.
- I would definitely suggest proof-reading for grammar or spelling errors prior to submitting your final additions to the page. I made some of these kinds of changes throughout your draft.