User talk:Swong97/sandbox

Sources

Your sources look good. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:22, 1 November 2015 (UTC)

The Lead

Your draft is a start, but it needs some work. First of all, you need to convert the list at the end to a full sentence or several sentences. It needs to be part of the paragraph. Secondly, it's not clear what you mean by company fraud. Maybe you had a different concept in mind. Perhaps loss of revenue or customer complaints? Josef Horáček (talk) 16:32, 2 November 2015 (UTC)

@Josefhoracek: I fixed my lead i hope it's good now. Swong97 (talk) 16:58, 7 November 2015 (UTC)

It's a lot better. There are still some stylistic and grammatical problems, but the content is there. You should replace "There job" with "Their job" in the last sentence and then post the lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:22, 10 November 2015 (UTC)