User talk:Stardiff9
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 12:50, 10 October 2019 (UTC)
Miguelitos Draft Peer Review
[edit]Hello. Good job on your article draft! It looks like you found a lot of great sources with information that is relevant to the topic. In my opinion the lead section in your draft looks good as it doesn't look like there is much information on the topic. Your structure looks good. I'd recommend instead of listing the preparation steps for the Miguelitos to have them in paragraph form. For example, in your draft you say:
- Defrost the puff pastry and extend over a flat surface with flour
- Cut in squares of 4 cm (1.5 inches). Put the squares in a baking tray
- Glaze the puff pastry with whisked egg
Instead of this, I'd recommend saying something like: "After defrosting the puff pastry and extending it over a flat surface with flour, cut the pastry in 4 cm squares. Then, glaze the squares with whisked egg." For me at least, this would be a better read, but that's just me ¯\_(ツ)_/¯.
Overall, I think you did a good job of keeping the article's tone neutral. There's just one part where there might be some bias when you say "After being apart of the military in 1960 he migrated to a place called Pamplona where his masterpiece was created." In my opinion, it is biased to say that the Miguelito is a masterpiece. Instead, you could say "...Pamplona where he created the Miguelito, which many consider to be a masterpiece." That way, you're just stating a common viewpoint. Other than that, I think you kept a neutral tone in your draft.
Your references look good. The links work. I just have one suggestion regarding the references. I glanced over them, and in one, https://web.archive.org/web/20100125111208/http://www.albacity.org/recetas/miguelitos.htm, I found some information not in your article. It was about how the desert is hard to ship and that it has been copied by some. I think maybe you might want to include this.--Kmubeen (talk) 00:33, 6 November 2019 (UTC)