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Ssahay2's Peer Review
[edit]Lead:
Based on the lead, I get a good overall feel for what the article will include. The information regarding his artistic style and what it conveys from his viewers is great. However, it may be more suitable to include this somewhere in his “Career” section or possibly create a new section that solely discusses his style. Overall, the lead is good.
Structure:
The two current sections are in a good order. As I previously mentioned, it may be beneficial to add a “Style” section. I think it would best fit between “Early Life” and “Career.” In this section, you could mention the style in which this artist’s photography would fall under. Additionally, you could then transfer all of the information from the lead that discusses his personal style and “feel” to complete this new section.
Balance:
In terms of section balance, the “Early Life and Education” section could be added to. There isn’t much information regarding his family or childhood, so any extra information that could be added would make a significant difference.
Neutral Content:
The article is balanced in terms of bias. There isn’t any part of the article in which one particular view is favored.
Reliable Sources:
Of the sources I could access, they seemed to be reliable and unbiased. There were a few reference links that were expired.
Summary:
Overall, this article is coming along well. A few minor adjustments could significantly improve the article. It is encyclopedic as it should be and does a good job of explaining who Paul Sepuya is.