User talk:SouthwesternMarcello1/sandbox
AC (Peer Review for Marcello): 1st Section:
- In the first paragraph are you talking about the nervous system overall or is there a specific type of nervous system that you're explaining?
- I believe the second sentence should be split into two sentence to make it more cohesive.
2nd Section:
- In the second paragraph I think substituting the word "desired" instead of "wanted" would sound a bit more scientific.
- In the last sentence of the second paragraph, the semi-colon should come after the word "complex" instead of it being in front of the word "if".
3rd Section:
- In the first paragraph you spelled nucleic incorrect. Also, I think that phrase sounds better like "15-20 nucleic acids in length".
- You could split the second sentence of the second paragraph into two sentences due to it sounding like a run on sentence.
- In the last sentence of the second paragraph, you should add a comma after "barrier".
- In the third paragraph I think you should add a colon instead of a comma.
4th section:
- In the first sentence, do you mean maximum or minimum? Just want to make sure, because I was under the impression that you meant maximum when explaining the threshold within the trinucleotide repeat expansion.
Citations:
- Looks good!
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