User talk:Sophialester/sandbox

Sources

I assume you're working on the drinking article. Your sources and citations look great. Go ahead and add the citations to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:27, 21 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The Lead

Your lead needs a little bit of work. First of all, you should provide some dates for the different periods you mention. Secondly, you need to maintain a neutral point of view. Right now, the lead reads like it was written by a fan of the team. I understand that this is a flaw of the whole article, but you must improve the article by writing an impartial lead. Also, the Rangers still play at the Madison Square Garden - your lead is a bit misleading on that. Finally, proofread for capitalization. Josef Horáček (talk) 04:35, 28 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Your revision improved the lead a little, but you didn't address all the problems I mentioned in my previous comment. I saw you posted the lead in the article, and you'll notice that somebody rewrote it. I think the rewrite is good, so you should just leave it. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:01, 9 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]