User talk:Shireenzameen/sandbox
Hey Shireen, This is Ben from Biology 151~
Some things you may want to consider changing, adding, or explain are: - What are zones 3-8 ( I know you said from the Eastern US to the Midwest but I'm still really confused, maybe consider just erasing that phrase entirely) - Maybe quickly explain what Corms are, like "Corms, a swollen underground plant stem" - "If amending the soil, try for high calcium and magnesium levels and low potassium and phosphorus levels." I'm assuming this is for soil nutrients but I wasn't 100% sure on what this line meant. Does this mean high calcium and magnesium levels with low potassium and phosphorus levels produce healthier plants? And how do these levels effect growth or the plant's reproduction (or anything in general) - Last part looks good~
Overall the draft pretty good so far! Just keep adding more~
Thanks, Ben! Great suggestions. - Shireen
Response to Feedback
[edit]Thanks, Ben! Great suggestions.
- Numbered zones are used to indicate growing regions of plants and hardiness for climates. They are standard and universally defined and used by botanists, biologists, gardeners, etc. Good idea to explain/link it for people who are not familiar. I will link it to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hardiness_zone
- I will add that corms are similar to bulbs and tubers and link it to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Corm
Hey Shireen, This is Cheryl from Bio 151 at Montgomery College -I really liked your over all draft, but have the similar queries as Ben has above such as questions such as what Corms are? Or provide a clickable link on what corms are or can lead us to the topic on corms. -I think you should also add more content to your overall draft. I like that your made great use of your sources, I see you placed your sources in a different slot, or rather added them later, I suppose that is what you did. Your article seems neutral and it does not seem as though you were making any effort into convincing others of what and what they should believe in, but rather showed a balanced view of the topic in question. which is absolutely wonderful. As you abided by the rules of Wikipedia glamorously. -Possibly if you could add direct links to certain pages required for your wikipedia article that courl further expanciate some certain terms, that would be fantastic in my opinion.
- Cheryl from Bio 141 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cobiadi (talk • contribs) 03:00, 19 November 2016 (UTC)
Response to Feedback
[edit]Thanks, Cheryl!
- I will link corms to the Wikipedia page about them.
- Based on your and Professor Hirshorn's feedback, I will try to find more information about the plant's roles in ecosystems and expand on its importance for pollinators. Hopefully, I will find enough to make a new section.
- I do link a few things to other Wikipedia pages already, but I am adding 2 more for hardiness zones and corms.
Draft Feedback
[edit]Shireen, you have done a great job researching this species, as well as in citing your references in the body of your work. Your references also look very good, and your writing and organization are very clear. The photos that you have found are also great - do be sure to check out Wikipedia requirements per including photos though (e.g., do they have to be open source photos?).
In reading through this article addition, it looks like you have mainly provided (very good) information to add to the sections that are already in this article. However, I am curious as to if there are any additional sections that you think it would be helpful to add to this article? Also, adding a Table of Contents to this article that lists all of the sections looks like it would be helpful.
It does look like you need a bit more depth to your article addition, and one idea to consider is to expand upon your pollination statement. Would this information perhaps be a good fit for a section called "Role in ecosystems" or something similar? In your Cultivation section, I think your wording here is fine - perhaps change "don't" to "do not" though.
But, overall, this looks very good. Rhirshorn (talk) 02:14, 24 November 2016 (UTC)
Response to Feedback
[edit]Thank you, Professor Hirshorn.
- The photos are from Wikipedia itself.
- Just to clarify, I added the section on Medicinal Uses that is in the article as part of our assignment to add to an existing article.
- I will add a table of contents.
- I like the idea of a section on ecosystems. I had a hard time finding a lot of information on this particular species, but I will try to find more on this topic so I can expand it.