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Hello, ShannonDaley, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:53, 24 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback

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Some feedback on your draft

  • It looks like you copied text from the sport dog nutrition article without clicking "edit" first. As a result, some of your references are messed up. You'll need to go through your draft carefully and fix the ones that take you back to the sport dog article. For example, in the Fibre section there are some references that look like [11] instead of [11] - those need to be fixed.
  • Your work needs copy-editing. There are missing spaces between sentences. The article mixes American and English spelling (e.g., "fiber" and "fibre").
  • References go after punctuation, not before.
  • You need to include links to other articles. Any term that is likely to be unfamiliar to the average reader should be linked the first time it appears in the article.
  • References should appear immediately after the statements they support. There should be a minimum of one reference per paragraph, and there shouldn’t be any text after the last reference in a paragraph. There are entire paragraphs with no supporting references.
  • You need to make sure that all the information is specific to sport dogs. General information about the nutritional requirements of all dogs should be elsewhere - maybe in the dog food article.

Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:12, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

thank you

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thank you Ian we will work on those updates. I am unclear on what you mean from the last point you made about requirements of 'all dogs should be elsewhere'? is there a specific point you are talking about? Also for the finer spelling should we be using the English or the American way? Also we are a little unsure if we need to have the parts in our sandbox page that are on the original page that we have not edited or do not plan to edit? thank you for your help it is greatly appreciated ShannonDaley (talk) 16:17, 29 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]


When you're writing about things that are true for all dogs, just reference the dog article. In the info isn't there already, add it to the dog article. For example

Protein is an essential component in any dog's diet. Muscle, hair, skin, ligaments, cartilage, and organs are structurally and functionally supported by protein.[1] In comparison to the average pet dog, a performance or sporting dog requires a much greater protein intake to keep up with the physiological demands of high activity. These demands are a result of wear and tear on muscles and other organ tissues caused by strenuous activity.[2] For sporting dogs, getting adequate protein is particularly important because it helps to reduce striated muscle tissue damage during exercise, which improves endurance and physical health.[1]

References

  1. ^ a b Hill, R. C. (December 1998). "The nutritional requirements of exercising dogs". The Journal of Nutrition. 128 (12 Suppl): 2686S–2690S. ISSN 0022-3166. PMID 9868242.
  2. ^ Kronfeld, D. S.; Ferrante, P. L.; Grandjean, D. (December 1994). "Optimal nutrition for athletic performance, with emphasis on fat adaptation in dogs and horses". The Journal of Nutrition. 124 (12 Suppl): 2745S–2753S. ISSN 0022-3166. PMID 7996286.
The part I italicised there isn't about sport dogs, it's about all dogs. But since you're just making a comparison, it's probably fine.

Protein is also a vital component in bodily functions such as transporting oxygen and energy to the muscles, regulating blood glucose levels, fighting infections, and repairing tissues.[1] Many diets targeted for performance dogs contain 30% protein, which supports prevention of training induced anemia.[1] However, dogs performing in different athletic activities can require varying amounts of protein and essential amino acids. For example, studies have shown that optimal performance from sled dogs will require a high protein, high fat diet, where 30 to 40% of energy comes from protein and 50% of energy comes from fat compared to any other diet. Greyhounds which mostly compete in short but intense activities such as sprint racing were found to require a moderate protein (25% energy) and moderately high fat (30-50% energy) diet.[1]

References

  1. ^ a b c Cite error: The named reference :9 was invoked but never defined (see the help page).

Here the part I italicised is less necessary to understand your specific points. Leave out the work "However" and the rest stands alone pretty well. But if the first part isn't there already, you might want to add it to the dog article.

The fat section, on the other hand, is a lot more general.

Fat is an important component of the sporting dogs diet as it is a large contributor of energy. This is because when you are calculating the calorie content using the modified Atwater's equation, fat contributes on a factor of 8.5 x the amount of fat nutrient compared to protein and carbohydrates that are only multiplied by 3.5.[1] This is because fat is a lot more calorie dense. It is the primary source of energy used by dogs during endurance exercises such as sled dog racing that uses mainly aerobic metabolism.[2] The use of fat as fuel for aerobic pathways during exercise has been proven to be a more efficient use of energy than muscle glycogen as fuel for anaerobic pathways.[1] In sport dogs, meeting energy requirements from high energy expenditure daily can be challenging for the owners, so efficiency in energy metabolism becomes an important factor to consider in diet formulation. The correct amount of dietary fat can increases the length of stamina in addition to energy production, while decreasing lactic acid production, and ultimately improving the aerobic performance of dogs.[3][4]

References

  1. ^ a b Cite error: The named reference :02 was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  2. ^ de Godoy, Maria R. C.; Beloshapka, Alison N.; Carter, Rebecca A.; Fascetti, Andrea J.; Yu, Zengshou; McIntosh, Bridgett J.; Swanson, Kelly S.; Buff, Preston R. (2014-09-30). "Acute changes in blood metabolites and amino acid profile post-exercise in Foxhound dogs fed a high endurance formula". Journal of Nutritional Science. 3. doi:10.1017/jns.2014.46. ISSN 2048-6790. PMC 4473172. PMID 26101602.{{cite journal}}: CS1 maint: PMC format (link)
  3. ^ Cite error: The named reference :3 was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  4. ^ Cite error: The named reference :9 was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
Here you can move quite a bit of info to the dog article (where it would be seen by a lot more people) and not lose anything critical to this article (because readers who want to know more can refer to the dog article).
Use whatever spelling is currently used in the article. If it uses American spelling, stick with that. If it uses English/Canadian spelling, stick with that. Be consistent.
Don't worry about what's currently in your sandbox or isn't. Just make sure that when you merge your changes into the original article, that you do it in small chunks, and that you use edit summaries to explain what you're up to. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:58, 1 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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