User talk:Sfern200/sandbox

This is an okay summary, but make sure that you are using your sources. There are no citations here, which will make it very difficult to write the full piece later on. Where is your list of sources? Alfgarciamora (talk) 12:07, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

@Sfern200: You've done an AMAZING job with your page, Sara! Keep up the great work! =) As you continue building your page, make sure you read over the text and make sure that it is encyclopedic in style. Alfgarciamora (talk) 19:05, 4 November 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi! I find your topic rather interesting. Make sure to really focus on setting up your lead section of your article because it is a bit confusing how it is set up right now. I think that Barney Josephson would be a great person to expand on since he played such a major part. Not a full biography of course but how he impacted Cafe Society and maybe some excerpts from his book. There is of course some grammer mistakes that you need to fix before the final draft. Organization is very important in a wiki page so think about how to set up these topics to help it flow better. Chaz0002 (talk) 03:11, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey there!! Aw thank you, yeah this topic is so interesting and goes so deep into other subjects. Its fascinating how it's connected to SO much other stuff. Yes most definitely want to add on to Barney Jospheson, and add onto more of the jazz roots and the music within this culture. hahah yes grammar will be fixed in due time, its mainly a rough draft that I want to perfect and then fix up and make it Wikipedia ready. Thank you for notes and help!!(: chaz0002 Sfern200 (talk) 20:41, 25 October 2016 (UTC)