User talk:Scottdirkb
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:34, 23 October 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review on Christopher Myers Wikipedia page
[edit]Hi Scott!
I like that you've eliminated the current article's too brief "Biography" section and elaborated on that for the lead. It reads much better this way.
One copy-editing note -- the last thought in the lead section, "Chris Myers also has a book imprint with Random House," should be its own sentence. Replace the comma preceding that thought with a period.
I'm glad you've made a new section for his Fine Art works that are to be kept separate from his work on Children's Literature and you've done a great job finding accurate sources for all of these.
I'm not sure it's required, but on my article I added links to the lists of awards and honors, as applicable, just so they can be externally verified. They're all pretty easy to find just by googling.
I appreciate that you put in an External Links section -- I was struggling to come up with an appropriate name for this section of links I'd found in my research but didn't actually use as citations -- I think I'll borrow this heading title, thanks!
Some other notes:
The External Links section should use a heading font.
I would reorganize the Fine Art and Awards sections to begin with the most recent and decrease by year like a resume/CV does -- I’m not certain what the preferred format is for Wikipedia though.
I also might format the Fine Art entries as a bulleted list so it's clearer which description is attached to which exhibition.
I was confused by the Henrietta Lacks -- Vaslav Nijinsky connection on the Fine Art list. By following the link for the 2018 exhibition labeled here as "Fire in the Head: A Chapel for Henrietta Lacks," I realized that there is an error on that article about the exhibition. Myers's official website shows that there are two separate bodies of work -- one called "Fire in the Head," the shadow puppets about Nijinsky (https://www.kalyban.com/fireinthehead) that were exhibited at the SCAD Museum; and another called "Fourth Class Relic: A Chapel for Henrietta Lacks," which consists of stained glass windows that reference the HeLa cells originating from Lacks's cervical cancer (https://www.kalyban.com/fourthclassrelic). It's unclear where the windows are displayed and/or installed, if at all, but they might be added to your Fine Art list.
Similarly, the previous entry, about "Go Forth" (2016), I'm interpreting that NY Times article as saying Myers designed the set pieces, not the play itself, but I could be wrong about that.
All in all, great job on your article, Scott! I think it's much improved from the current version.
Sarah --SBryan29 (talk) 01:38, 17 November 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review From Rose Booker
[edit]Everything in the article appears to be relevant to the article topic. However, some things did distract me from the article. I see that the lead is partially copied from the original article yet the citations provided may not have been checked. The sentence, "his approach often facilitates connections between artists" appears without citation. Is the citation the same as the first sentence? I do appreciate the change you made to the lead, stating he is an artist and writer (how the original had it was confusing).
Curiously, a biography of Christopher Myers is missing from this draft. There is a short one available on the published Wiki article, but it is small and could be expanded if there is information out there regarding his childhood, adolescence, and adulthood. I see that you have brought that section into the lead but I would encourage you to expand it instead. For example, is he married? Does he have children? Where does he live now? Where has he lived? How would he describe his upbringing? Middle-class? Working-class? Upper-class? Finding out the answers to these questions may lead to a strong biography section.
I do not see any bias statements here, but I do attribute that to a lack of statements regarding Myers's life. We have a list of his achievements but no critical analysis or opinions on his work have been presented (beyond descriptive ones in the lead). This may be an opportunity to present multiple sides to his work, in a reception section. How did critics view his works?
All but one link in the citation works. This link, "Christopher Myers". HarperCollins Publishers: World-Leading Book Publisher. Retrieved 2019-11-10, does not work. The sources provided that do work seem to support the claims of the article.
Not all facts are supported by a reference. I already mentioned one, but there seven more in the Fine Arts section that needs direct citation.
Overall, I think you have a good base to start building an excellent Wiki article.