User talk:Sbyars4
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Brianda (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:51, 9 September 2024 (UTC)
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When talking about Jerry Lorenzo, I think it is important to talk about the inspiration and background story of how he started the brand Fear of God and what made him take these steps of branding in the worldly fashion realm. When Lorenzo was younger, "reading devotionals became a habit throughout the household My Utmost for His Highest by Oswald Chambers" was a consistent reading for him and his family. [1] This helped Jerry stimulate a lot of ideas and helped him dive deeper into what the branding intention was. "The hard cover specifically stimulated a lot of Lorenzo’s deep religious background portraying darkness, this made the entire concept basically an aesthetic of nature." [2] This is one of the main contributions to his brand Fear of God.
Is this cited correctly?
Please help me with...
Sbyars4 (talk) 00:58, 21 November 2024 (UTC)
- Not really. It's kinda malformed. Maybe use {{cite web}}Have you asked your instructor for help ABG (Talk/Report any mistakes here) 01:49, 21 November 2024 (UTC)
- Technically, way you've formatted the citations is acceptable. It's possible for a reader to find the source and look at it for themselves. You could definitely improve your technique by using more of the parameters available for citation templates.
- The way you've written your draft, however, is in the form of a personal essay and not at all as an encyclopedia article should be written.
- And the two sources you've cited have problems. The first is largely based on an interview with your subject - it will be considered a primary source and while some of the facts he relates may be cited to the interview, it's completely unable to help establish notability. The second source is an out-and-out storefront site, so we cannot use it at all. — jmcgnh(talk) (contribs) 02:55, 21 November 2024 (UTC)
- ^ "God's Plan: How Jerry Lorenzo Went From Sports to Nightlife to Fashion's Cult Favorite". www.complex.com. Retrieved 2024-10-02. "The History of Jerry Lorenzo". Feature. 2024-10-25. Retrieved 2024-10-11.