User talk:Sarrrah87
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[edit]Hello, Sarrrah87, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:10, 1 October 2015 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi Sarrrah87. Nice work on your article draft. One thing to be careful about though is making sure that the statements you make in your article are supported by reliable sources. For example, you open by saying that "Childhood obesity is an epidemic that is creating a generation who will be outlived by their parents". A strong declaration like that needs to be supported by a high quality source. And in a case like this, where you're making a statement about events in the future ("who will be outlived by their parents"); that is either a conclusion based on projections from data or it's an opinion; in either case, it should be attributed to a source and should not be stated in Wikipedia's voice. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:38, 20 October 2015 (UTC)