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Hello, @Sarah raslan:, I am Eggishorn and I saw your request for help. You didn't put any question here but based on the question you also asked at Talk:Molar Incisor Hypomineralisation, I'm assuming you want help with that article. To start with, that's actually a really impressive effort by a new user creating their first article. You formatted it correctly and included all the basic necessary information as well as citations to verify the claims you made.
I changed the first heading from "Molar Incisor Hypomineralisation" to "Description" because it doesn't make much sense for the first section to have the same title as the article itself.
One big improvement you could make at this point is writing a Lead Section often referred to as a "lede". The lede goes before any of the sections that have headings (i.e., it does not have its own heading) and summarizes the rest of the article. Yours would go before the "Description" heading. I think you may have been trying to write one with: "Molar Incisor Hypomineralisation is a congenital dental defect affecting enamel ...hypoplasia." The issue is that type of sentence works fine as an introduction in a medical journal article or in a dental textbook where the readers know the jargon but it is much more opaque to a general reader. You might want to start with something like: "Molar Incisor Hypomineralisation is a tooth problem present from birth affecting the hardness and durability of the outer layer of the permanent molars."
The second thing you could do is add more links, particularly for more technical terms. This takes advantage of one of the great tools of a wiki: hypertext. You could, for example change the first sentence of the "Description" section to link to mineralisation, permanent, molars, etc.
This is not an exhaustive list of every thing that could improve that article, but it is a good starting point. I hope this helps, and welcome to the project. Eggishorn (talk) (contrib) 16:48, 11 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

thanksEggishorn for your help,i will work on your suggestionsSarah raslan (talk) 17:38, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Help me!

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Please help me with...my new article enamel microabrasion

Sarah raslan (talk) 00:58, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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Enamel microabrasion article was improved and was rewritten,how can i improve more ?Sarah raslan (talk) 02:51, 13 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]