User talk:Sarah Hailey

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Hello, Sarah Hailey, and welcome to Wikipedia! I'm looking forward to your your contributions to Social anxiety. I hope you like the place and decide to stay. Here are some pages that you might find helpful:

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Social Anxiety Contributions

Hi Sarah, I think you made many contributions that helped the flow and clarity of the article, and I think the information you added (specifically to the Low Self-Esteem section) is very clear and provides a better understanding of the causes of social anxiety. You completed each of the adjustments you planned on fixing. The only thing I would suggest would be to work on the reference in your article. It is cited properly, but I think by adding more information to the article, like the year and researchers of the study, would provide a better understanding. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MeganVan123 (talk • contribs) 05:07, 8 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, I disagree with the text being cited properly. For instance: <ref>Daly, Caughlin, & Stafford, 1998</ref> is not enough. What is the title, is is a book or an article, and if it is a book, ideally it should also say on which page(s) the information was found. Lova Falk talk 07:57, 8 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"We've read"

Hi Sarah! In the Social anxiety article, section Low self-esteem, you wrote the following: "We've read that a social anxiety can develop from other's perceptions of one's self, thus having peer groups, caregivers and influential people around can impact the thoughts we have about our selves." Could you please change the "we've read" part. Who is this we? You? The authors of your book? How reliable is this information? Lova Falk talk 09:35, 24 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]