User talk:Sara with no h/sandbox
Peer Review
[edit]Hi Sara!
I thought you did an excellent job adding an epidemiology section to this article as well as adding to the treatment section. All of the information that you added is clear.
I have some ideas that you can consider while drafting the article. 1) Are there different treatments depending on age? Or do the treatments suggested apply to all age groups? 2) Are there any other types of treatments that people can use after surgery to minimize the likelihood of recurrence (e.g., use of hormones)? In addition, the link for for citation #7, does not work.
Great job! JessicaVoiceDisorders (talk) 01:59, 23 October 2017 (UTC)
- Hi Jessie,
- Thanks for your review! You ask some really interesting questions. I'm going to investigate both of them and see what I can add to my section - I think they would add really relevant information. As for citation #7, thanks for pointing that out! That's actually an artifact from the previous version of this section, but I will definitely need to remember to remove that citation when I transfer my final draft to the actual Wikipedia page.
- Thanks again :) Sara with no h (talk) 14:44, 1 November 2017 (UTC)
- Hi again!
- After looking more deeply into the research, it seems like treatments don't vary with age - however, as this was not stated explicitly in any of the sources I read, I don't feel like I should add it to the article. But your suggestion is extremely valuable. Thanks! Sara with no h (talk) 18:25, 3 November 2017 (UTC)
Chloe's peer review
[edit]Hello Sara with no H (cause h's are ew),
Great write up! It was very clear and easy to follow throughout. Your points are also very matter of fact and stated in a perfect "wiki" way. I also liked how you cited many of your points with more than one source, backing up your point many times. Somethings I thought as I read through you might consider:
You mentioned "papillomas" at one point without explaining what they are, and I do not know what they are. I have not read your entire subject page, so if they already explain it earlier, no worries!
I was wondering if you came across what "voice therapy" entails when working with this. It might be good to add a sentence or to just to give an idea of what it is.
I also do not know what "microdebriders" are - maybe see if there is another wiki page for this and just link it?
Again, amazing work - your words have made a great contribution to this page. Just wonderful. Keep being you.
- Hi Chloe!
- Thanks for your review and for the smile you put on my face! You raise some excellent points - I will re-read the current Wikipedia article and add the information that isn't explained earlier - I agree that some of my words are a little jargony! I'll also look into voice therapy and see if I can nail down more specifically what it entails.
- Thanks again for your review - and for being you ;) Sara with no h (talk) 14:46, 1 November 2017 (UTC)
Feedback from Nicole
[edit]Hi Sara
Great job. Your writing is clear and accessible to readers. You also contributed quite a number of citations. Just curious -- it seems that the order of the citation in the text is a bit out of the order. For example, "tracheoesophagyeal fistulae.[7][8][5][9] ". Not sure if it's something can be fixed.
Anyway, congrats to the good work. You're also responsive to your peer's comments.
Nicole — Preceding unsigned comment added by SCSD639 (talk • contribs) 22:32, 29 November 2017 (UTC)