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Rkjaouha Peer Review

I like what you have so far, although for the lead I would recommend either expanding on what you've already said or redoing it entirely. The reason I say this is because I starts off talking about nuclear fusion when the topic is simply forms of nuclear fusion. I noticed you get into that, but it's more towards the end of the lead which is a little weird and kind of misses the concept of what the lead is supposed to do which is give a general overview of the article right off the bat.

The structure seems fine and you already seem to have an adequate number of sources. You may want to go back and link key words in your document so people know those are important. Other than that I think your draft is going pretty well so far.

Peer Review Reply -Sufian Ahmad

Hi Rkjaouha,

           Thank you for the feedback. I agree on the lead part that might be astraying from the actual forms of nuclear fusion, but when I had submitted this topic for consideration I had the ways that nuclear fusion is being adopted as of now. There are two main methods of conducting nuclear fusion, Inertial Confinement method, and Magnetic confinement method. I apologize in advance about the misunderstanding but I think we can assimilate these methods as well as the actual molecular process by which nuclear fusion takes place in our article. I will work on the suggetions that you have posted as well.

Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sahmadncstate (talk • contribs) 17:58, 7 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Jay0598

Hi Sahmadncstate,

                 I think this is a good a draft, but what you have is common forms of nuclear fusion reactors and no common forms of nuclear fusion. I am not sure which we are supposed to do, but we could just have both. Other than that everything looks great!