User talk:Rmcoe/sandbox
Wow, this article is so much more like a REAL, informative topic than ours! It really looks fantastic, and your coverage of the topic is extremely thorough. Way to go on the references, too.
Some comments:
"Sex therapy is a strategy for the treatment of sexual dysfunction when there is no medical etiology (physiological), or as a complement to medical treatment."
- I think that this could benefit from some less technical language. "no medical etiology = physiological" doesn't quite make sense to me, either...
"The sexual dysfunctions which may be addressed by sex therapy include non-consummation, premature ejaculation, erectile dysfunction, low libido, unwanted sexual fetishes, sexual addiction, painful sex, or a lack of sexual confidence, assisting people who are recovering from sexual assault, problems commonly caused by stress, tiredness, and other environmental and relationship factors."
- I think that this sentence could use some internal (wikipedia) citations...
- Maybe a link to or explanation of "gender expression"?
- It "requires a rigorous evaluation" before it takes place, is that what is meant here...?
"The reason is that sexual dysfunction may have a somatic base or a psychogenic basis."
- Sorry I could use some more explanation on this...
"Today, sex therapy sessions are focused on the individual’s symptoms rather than the resolution of underlying psychodynamic conflicts that present themselves in adult relationships."
- Once again, I think that this is a little too smart-sounding for an everyperson's encyclopedia. Sorry! (that or it maybe just needs a few more internal links)
"The practice of sex therapy remains controversial and its approached with ambivalence in social, religious, and educational systems. The increased transformative approach to the field of sex therapy psychological biological, pharmacological, relational and contextual to sexual problems"
- Same as above...also, I think "its" could be "it is"
"Aging and Sexuality" section
- More internal citations, please! (sorry, I know they're a lot of work)
- I felt like this section did not fit completely with the rest of the article. while it is useful & relevant information (and would be perfect in a research paper, leading up to an explanation of why sex therapy could be useful for older adults), it just seems kind of out of place in the Wiki format. Maybe it should be its own page, or something?
"Over the years little attention has been paid to older adults and sexuality. As the population of older adults and life expectancy continues to grow there is information about sex therapy but it is often not easily acceptable."
- see bold edit
"Numerous endocrine, vascular and neurological disorders may interfere in sexual function, along with medications and surgeries"
- I don't know what some of these mean...sorry I'm ignorant
Let me know if any of this is unclear, or if you have other questions, please!
Way to go you two, this is really an awesome article, I'm so impressed!!
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