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Speedy deletion nomination of The Tobin School

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A tag has been placed on The Tobin School, requesting that it be speedily deleted from Wikipedia. This has been done under the criteria for speedy deletion, because the article seems to be unambiguous advertising that only promotes a company, product, group, service or person and would need to be fundamentally rewritten in order to become an encyclopedia article. Please read the general criteria for speedy deletion, particularly item G11, as well as the guidelines on spam.

If you can indicate why the subject of this article is not blatant advertising, . Clicking that button will take you to the talk page where you will find a pre-formatted place for you to explain why you believe the page should not be deleted. You can also visit the the article's talk page directly to give your reasons, but be aware that once tagged for speedy deletion, if the article meets the criterion, it may be deleted without delay. You may freely add information to the article that would confirm the subject's notability under Wikipedia guidelines. Please do not remove the speedy deletion tag yourself, but don't hesitate to add information to the article that would help make it encyclopedic, as well as adding any citations from independent reliable sources to ensure that the article will be verifiable. Feel free to leave a note on my talk page if you have any questions about this. Bagheera (talk) 19:07, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for your comment on my page. I completely understand an early effort not having quite the tone you were looking for. The article was actually very cleanly written, clear, well formatted, and grammatically strong. The overall tone though came across as being more promotional than factual.

With the article already gone, I can't really recommend a specific set of changes to make. I guess the suggestion I would make is to write it in such a way that a reader would come away with "here's the place, and this is what they do." Rather than "here's the place, and what they do is really cool." It wasn't at all over the top, and I don't intend to imply that here, but it did feel promotional.

Cheers! And happy editing. Bagheera (talk) 21:21, 26 July 2011 (UTC)