User talk:Ricov53/sandbox
I like the information on the page. The information you've found was very informative. The only issue is that your research is very wordy and can potentially sound like jargon to someone that does not have a clue about science. I do understand that the information has to be worded like that in order to convey your message. I would try to find a different way to phrase it to make it just a little more simple. Other than that, I enjoyed reading your article. 192.175.17.29 (talk) 02:28, 11 November 2015 (UTC)Danny Gibson
Hi Ricov53,
I think your page looks great, but it may be a a little difficult for some readers to understand such as a teenager. I would suggest just reading over your page and find any information that you can breakdown further in order for people to better understand. I notice under the category "surgical" that you forgot the letter'T' in the word "the" for the last sentence. Also, you may want to add links to the words asymptomatic, in vitro, and cobalamin in case some readers do not know what those words mean. Jmorris15 (talk) 08:57, 12 November 2015 (UTC)
- Great abstract. Very clear overall summary.
- Cite your symptoms in the section, not the header.
- Really nice mechanisms break down.
- Mechanism (and some other areas) could use more links.
- I'm not sure anything you described really falls under prevention. I would just remove that section.
- Nice summary of recent research.