User talk:Rfreyer88/sandbox
Hello,
I peer reviewed your article, bbandy716. To be honest there is a lot of valuable information in your lead section. For this reason, there wasn't much actual editing to do. The only real editing I did was minor spelling and grammar mistakes. You also did a great job by providing hyperlinks to other Wikipedia articles on subjects that you mentioned in your own article. For example, the links that you placed on "Papuan language", "Solomon Islands", "Central Solomon Languages", "Vella Lavella", and "Austronesian". The box that contains all the information regarding your language on the right side of the page is a great touch as well. It's up to date, has relevant information, and even has a citation in there. Great job. The only real thing that I suggest is that you try and find more sources. I see that you have less than ten sources and according to the amount of information that you have already put together, you could probably find more somewhere out there. Then again I'm not sure because the sources you have found could be the only ones out there but it wouldn't hurt to try and find more! It would only help you! Also, consider taking out the last quotation that you put in your lead section. I don't really think you need it. If you are going to use that information I suggest writing it without the quotations and then properly citing it.
Because your lead section is strong and concise, I think you should pack a good deal of information into your other sections. This will attest to the information you put in your lead and improve the overall quality of your article. For example, you state, "The amount of different languages spoken in the Solomon Islands is attributed to the dynamic geographic features of the island and the isolation of its' different populations." You should delve into this in a section about the geography of the area where this language is spoken. Many people tend to put too little information in the other sections in their article, this just leaves them with an overall weak one. It's called a lead in because it leads you in to the real meat of your article. Your formatting was done well and like I said the information in your lead was neutral and valuable so I have no doubt that you will complete the rest of your article correctly.
The verb construction section was a good thing to add, as it gives some good information and background on your language. I'm not sure if you intend to add more information to it or just leave it as it is with the sample verbs part but I think you should add more information about how exactly they construct their verbs. The "sample verbs" section would supplement that information. I also placed the "citation needed" tag next to the sentences where I believe the sources should be referenced. Great job so far, can't wait to see how your final draft will come out.
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